The Hands of Time

Inspired by James A. Michener's "Hawaii". Res Ipsa Loquitur

Just like how The Hands of Time cannot be stopped

The merciless beauty of this cruel World will not be mocked

The pain and misery of those lost Souls who were sadly caught

Believing that this life is the ever-lasting living Hell

In which they are destined to forever burn and rot

Though it hurts terribly, I see the World’s beauty

For it is without mercy, I know that Hell it is not

Without torment, you can never appreciate blessed happiness

That no matter how much money is spent, can never be bought

And

That is how it should be as The Hands of Time

Move across the face of this World’s eternal clock…..

Andrew N. Farrens

West Stockton, California

 

August 29, 2012
3:08 A.M.

 

 

Reviews

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Opening Comments
I thought this was a great poem. We can't compare our experiences if we have nothing else to compare them too.

Imagery
"Though it hurts terribly, I see the World’s beauty
For it is without mercy, I know that Hell it is not" I liked these lines, thought it showed a rough picture of what we see.

Grammar and Spelling
Love how you worded this in such a short write. Well done.

Closing Comments
It was really well written and thought out. I loved the structure.
Good job. :)

[Andrew N. Farrens]

thank-you....

[Kelsey]

This is beautiful. I really love everything about it- the message, the flow, the choice of words. Great job.

[David Scott]

Well penned. I enjoyed this even if I might have some phylosphical opinions that differ. You did a good job a making the point and the poetry was unique without being to obtuse.
Be Well

[Coyote Poetry]

This is powerful poetry. I like the many strong statements.
"I see the World’s beauty
For it is without mercy, I know that Hell it is not"
No weakness in this amazing poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[mandy]

i liked , "i see the world's beauty" it's true. if we didn't see the ugly part of life, we wouldn't appreciate the beautiful part. and without the unhappy, we wouldn't know what happy was either, good thoughts, andrew!

[Andrew N. Farrens]

thanks........

[de_maruf]

nice

[Yheela]

Liked it very much.

[lee von cleef]

Ok Pain, compact for you ,I like "Though it hurts terribly, I see the World's beauty"
Well placed for a variety of interpretations
Me I love Time and its twisting ,looping river ,I like dieing verbs too.
good job

[That_Girl]

I like this a lot, the end especially - really love those two lines. Nicely done.