Break up

'I love you' he said in a voice so debilitated. Melancholy rang in those indolent words. His benighted eyes could no more shelter those redundant tears of dissipating hope. The long lashes fluttered them out to make room for more of repressed pain to be divulged and undressed. 'I am sorry' as he fretted, his hands maneuvered gently from holding my chin and embraced them into mine that lay lifeless in my lap. My pounding heart exploded as his quivering lips kissed my bare shoulders... predictably for the last time. He arose, sundered and walked away ....along with the setting sun. My speechless world strung into an absolute imperfection. 

Author's Note

What do you think should I know?

Reviews

[Rhianne Ney]

This story is well expressed and clear your thoughts about this. Time itself knows when you'll heal and soon everything will go your way

[anxia]

Thank you for the review, Rhi :) Its totally fiction so I am absolutely fine right now :P
Please do let me know if there any mistakes in any regard .Thanks!

[Rhianne Ney]

No there's none, if you're asking me about grammar then I can't point anything out since I'm not sure with my own (:

[anxia]

Yep I was asking about grammar too. LOL its ok and thank you:)

[Rhianne Ney]

(: You're welcome

[Baby Ricochet]

Who ever cares less in a relationship holds the power

[anxia]

But in a true relationship neither should care any less right?? This is fiction by the way in the sense it has never happened to me :P Thanks for checking this out :)