You

A love poem.

Feeling deep inside,
i am feeling something high.
Although doors of my heart locked,
but you came in, passed by
like an arrow through my heart.

Oh! i try take this feeling out,
but it comes back in round.
I am driven away by your sight,
always in back of my mind.

I can breathe through blowing wind,
i can hear you from across the sky.
Clouds shower your love with rain,
i am bathing under wearing wide smiles.
Writing your name in mist soil,
i can smell the scent of your skin.
Shimmering sea reflects your glowing face,
you are everywhere and in everything.

Reviews

[MomzillaNC]

Lovely imagery. I see really improvement in your use of language

[Ana B.]

Colorful emotions and romantic thoughts. A gorgeous combination :)

[Emily]

Nice rhyming!
Well done!
Keep it up!

[~]

Hi Armin, a waterfall of feelings and imagery. I do like the bathing under the love's rain. Nothing better than feeling the love someone has for us. :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"you are everywhere and in everything"

perfect ending to a very strong poem with that overpowering essence of love....carried across a deep blue sky.

[armin]

Thankyou Jacob for your kind words.

[R Smith]

Just lovely Armin, its got the quality of a song about it, maybe you could add some music, would be a hit I think :)

[armin]

Thankyou Richard for a lovely review, very much appreciated .

[Valentine]

When we aren't looking, a special someone can sneak up and catch us not prepared..Valentine

[C. Lee Battaglia]

Love is the greatest gift we can give or receive and you showed the emotions perfectly!
I Loved this poem... It was short but had deep impact on the reader!
Keep up the great work Armin!

C. Lee Battaglia

[Confuser]

It is a beautiful poem Armin: There are so many lovely lines in it:
I can breathe through blowing wind,
i can hear you from across the sky.
Clouds shower your love with rain,
i am bathing under wearing wide smiles.
Writing your name in mist soil,
i can smell the scent of your skin.
Shimmering sea reflects your glowing face,
you are everywhere and in everything.

All of these emotions of love you describe so beautifully. Thank you Armin. Dale

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Love is beautiful, so is your poem. :) Rudi