My Heart Is Cornered

My Heart Is Cornered

A Poem by Amila Jay

I am almost here but you were never there

I can cry a river but will that make you care

Rain drops freeze my lips from saying

How much I loved you when everyone dared

Falling amongst the sound of your words

That pours as tears down my cheeks

My heart is but a mirror of broken dreams

As I dug my trench to bleed

I am nothing more inside

My heart is cornering away from me

 

© 2012 Amila Jay


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Amila Jay
Just thoughts flashing by ...Thanks to all those who read and review :)

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So emotional, and thoughtful, I can't help but admire the intensity with which you wrote this poem. Every word has been beautifully written, and seems like it has been hand-picked, chosen carefully, and this shows exactly the fragility of the heart, and how we bleed love and suffer from ignorance as it goes "Falling amongst the sound of your words that pours as tears down my cheeks". This is so beautifully written, I really enjoyed. However, heartbreak is just a phase of life, we all get over it, and eventually, life mends it. :)

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wow!!!!this is an amazing poem ..so sad yet very well written..


Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Aw, Amila...There's so much heartbreak in this piece...So sad...Anyway, I like it...
:)))

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Wow. I can't believe how accurately your words describe my present mood. Its short and yet, so easy to relate. I love this.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Well written good poem, what I especially like is breaking up the lines so that just one word hangs over for the the new line, so it has clever emjambment, as well as a very vivid last line, a hammer metaphor.Well done.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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such a sad poem
almost brang me to tears,

Posted 12 Years Ago


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the sadness in this piece grips my throat.... I can really feel the emotion in these words... well expressed!!

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Somber and Moving, the cadence is good, nice write amila

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Such a sad and very emotional poem..and yet so relatable..
Well written
You have penned the emotions well

My heart is cornering away from me

That last line is a wowee for me..I like that..that one line has such a vivid image to it and was a perfect ending

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Added on March 31, 2012
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Amila Jay
Amila Jay

Kandy, Sri Lanka



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