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Starring Out at the Ocean

Starring Out at the Ocean

A Poem by Luna

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Starring out at the ocean,
An ocean the richest color of blues and greens,
The light house reflects it light,
Making each wave shine.

Starring out at the ocean,
Longing to see your ship roll in,
The ship that holds my heart,
The ship that holds my love.

Starring out at the ocean,
I watch the tides,
Imagine seeing your ship roll in on one,
Seeing your face light up when you see mine.

Starring out at the ocean,
A ship comes into view on the horizon,
The light house lighting it's way
As it rolls into port.

Starring out at the ocean,
Tears roll down my face,
I drop the letter into the ocean,
The ocean that stole my love away.

Starring out at the ocean,
My heart goes numb,
The water washes me clean of all feeling,
As the writing on the letter disappears.

Starring out at the ocean,
I think about you,
My only love,
Eternally rolling in the ocean current.

Diving into the ocean,
I sink to the bottom,
Meeting you there,
My mind thinking of only you.

Drifting to the bottom of the ocean,
I smile as I draw in my last breath,
The salty water going into my lungs,
I will soon be with you.

Starring out at the ocean,
Your ghostly hand clasped in mind,
We watch the waves together,
Never apart, in love forever.

Starring out at the ocean,
An ocean the richest color of blues and greens,
The light house reflects it light,
Making each wave shine.

© 2010 Luna




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Amazing, a tad confusing at times but amazing emotions and feeling.

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Posted 10 Years Ago


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a subject I am quite familiar with...well, the water part


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Posted 10 Years Ago


This is such a touching piece. I really enjoyed it, but the one thing that bothered me was that you were misspelling "staring." Other than that I thought this poem was simply amazing and wonderfully written. Thank you for sharing.

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Posted 10 Years Ago


Poem is outstanding. I like the description and your story. Poem is beautiful and filled with the emotion of love/kindness. Thank you.
Coyote

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Posted 10 Years Ago


It was fine I like the idea I like the love and dreams felt and lived But for onetopic i think it mightbe a bit long i would trim it down to keep it interesting
tate

Posted 10 Years Ago


wow this is wonderful touching loving. you should do have talent you will be on the best seller list one day I know it !!!!!!

Posted 10 Years Ago


This being in my library of genres to favor, you've touched me by the representation and portrayal of words, imagery, smells and tastes (ocean water) and the fundamental longing desire for 'that Love' ... I will tell you this, my dear poetic friend: this is the best I've seen from you and you've captured me entirely! Splendid work!

Posted 10 Years Ago



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Luna
Luna

Civil War Capital, VA



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