Eavesdropping

Imagine a tall red headed girl quite beautiful with her head thrown back listening to an orchestra play as she hides in the shadows......

I, the musically uninclined

Stand relishing every poignant note letting it fill my very being

Behind the curtains of obscurity

As the orchestra encores again...and yet one more time

Responding to the crowds overwhelming applause

 

 

 

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OR

 

I stand letting it overwhelm my mind

Stand relishing every poignant note

Letting every chord fill my very being

It quenchs my thirsty soul

Overwhelm me, pure music of the night

My curtain of obscurity cloaks me as I listen

Mind soaring as the orchestra responds to the crowd

 

 

 

 

 

(read each lines first word descending)

 

 

Author's Note

Which do you like better??? Thanks for reviewing!!!

Reviews

[universalove]

this is good to the heart and spirit. it lets me know that there is music before hiphop.

[R J Askew]

The first version, definitely.

[Satine]

I like the first version in its simplicity (typo=chrowds s/b crowds').


Satine

[Chad Halle]

i enjoy them both- though i do think the second stands better on it's own, but together (especially reading the first of each line) they speak volumes- very enjoyable