Dower a scrap of sunset with voice

Dower a scrap of sunset with voice

A Poem by Laura E. Aranda
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The sunset longs to become mortal, First lines of each stanza By Edgar Fawcett. Written for The Glosa poetry contest

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How falls it, thou hast come to fly

A wispy fading dream longing to try

To become less fleeting than melting ice

An ever dying inspiration sipping mortality's entice

 

Did some orange tulip, flaked with black

Sing you a melody that got you off track

Which rainstorm made you long to feel

Rivers of sensations before them you kneel

 

Yearning toward Heaven until its wish was heard

Lady Sunset cloaked with night, her mentalities blurred

Came to Earth as one of us, consuming our sinful dust

Hearing heartaches, her innocence birthed rust


Desire unspeakably to be a bird

Lady Sunset's folly went unheard

Toil and grit became her weakly hue

Nights came slowly as the newest sunset faded blue
 

© 2008 Laura E. Aranda


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Laura E. Aranda
I love the idea of Glosa poetry!

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I know nothing about faucets and I prefer matte to glossy (told you I am no poet, and that you should all know it)... still, I know what I like, and that is a piece that gives me an opportunity to think (about something other than what I was already thinking); and this work gave me a chance to wonder - imagine, if everything dreamed of being something else - everything, always thinking that the something else is better. Okay, now stop thinking that and return to this poem - it is beautifully crafted, and it leads us along the path of that dream, that fades, turning the sunsets blue. Thank you for sharing this with us. :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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I had almost forgotten about the works of Edgar Fawcett, as I read him when I was in school. Loved every line, and this flowed nicely. Wonderfully written.

~Anna Rose

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A beautiful poem. It took me to a happy place inside me and I smiled. I needed that smile!! Thanks!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I adore the rhyme and the use of langueage in this...

Posted 12 Years Ago


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LSS
Nicely done, your additions flowed and formed a larger picture. Simple enough to explain the thought but short enough to be sweet.
LSS

Posted 12 Years Ago


I dont read or understand alot of poetry and this was no exception but your words really painted a colorful picture in my head that helped me enjoy this so much more so thank you for a wonderful poem that stimulated my mind in more ways than one :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A very good glosa.

Sal

Posted 13 Years Ago


I have to say that I really don't enjoy Glosa poetry, I'm more for simple poetry( free verse, rhyming ect) I found this hard to keep me interested in reading it past the first few lines, not that is bad poetry it's just that is not my cup of tea is all, and I'm sure that for those who can get into would find it a great write. I do "thank you " for sharing it though. PW

Posted 13 Years Ago


I think your writing itself is good. You don't need to add staza's of another piece of writing in. I imagery is well done.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I really felt at peace with this :) Very intriguiging and heartfelt. I really like the creativeness in it as well. Beautiful flow and love the imagery. Awesome! Hope u win in the contest!! Im rootin for ya ;)

B.A.

Posted 13 Years Ago


I like this. Very rythmic and on track. I like the language you used and the imagery fit very well. I also liked that you were able to incorporate someone elses work with your own and do it seemlessly. Good work Laura.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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