Breathless

Breaking old habits too late, growing a sack and telling someone how you feel - too late, points of views.

A lesson life has taught me

Is to always keep my heart completely empty

Feelings are felt by the weak

And someone to care for isn't someone to seek

Secrets are kept for a reason

And to betray them is treason

You came along and taught me to express

My thoughts and feelings, you said to just confess

So I did and in a drunken state of mind

I let you see a part of me you weren't supposed to find

I revealed the way I felt about you

A pound of raw emotion; what I said was true

Alcohol used to control me it was what I was all about

Then you lead me down a different route

I claimed my freedom

And crowned myself king, the world is my kingdom

My new point of view came two days too late

And so I missed out on my lucky chance my grip on fate

Sometimes the past is too hard to forget

I grew up the hard way, I was terrified of regret

Now I'm faced with a morose situation

I'm overcome with a numbing sensation

I hear a profound silence as I realize

That I just lost the most beautiful prize

I'm left with these could-have-been memories

But I'm supposed to watch them fly away with the breeze

I fell in love with your perfect smile

But the language I speak is that of denial

I'm looking forward to the month of December

I hope I'll freeze, maybe I won't remember

Sometimes I still think it's best to be emotionless

To march through the fields of life completely painless

But when I watched you leave, you left me breathless...

Author's Note

Opinions? Comments? Much appreciated.

Reviews

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I'm looking forward to the month of December
I hope I'll freeze, maybe I won't remembe
Sometimes I still think it's best to be emotionless
To march through the fields of life completely painless
But when I watched you leave, you left me breathless...

this...makes me breahtless!
exquisite!^.^

[White Ink]

Congratulations for winning 4th place in "Life has taught me contest".
I enjoyed reading this again, well done!

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

excellent story to this well written poem!

[Midnight_Mystery]

great write..i enjoyed this :)

[ColorblindMartian.]

I know this feeling quite well, Alcohol is trully a Terrible wretched substance. But good at
Exposing true emotion. Well done, I really relate to this. Your rhyme and words were great.

[Hayley]

The only bad thing I have to say about this poem is the grammar. Overall, I can tell there is raw emotion behind this, which makes it that much stronger. Loved the last line as well.

[Praiser]

A life's lessons, for every roses you pick is not a blessing
Strong with passion to tale your eyes, don`t it now feel good to cry
What I thought I had was breathless but it was when I let her go to

[Coyote Poetry]

A very strong story in the poem. When someone special leave our life. Can take our breath away and leave us weak. No weakness in this poem. Just a poem with a strong ending. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Ruth]

Poignantly versed love....life's lessons are not all roses! And by the time we get around to voicing the thoughts and feelings, a whirlpool has already immersed the outcome....we can only observe it leave......beautifully expressed xx

[White Ink]

oh I love this! added to my faves.

[Judy Ponceby]

Very touching write. Seems you are able to write well about self examination in a way that portrays the pain and insecurities we can all find at times.