Losing the red...

My Nights are as empty,
as my eyes,
without the sight of you...

My days are as cold,
as my soul,
without the warmth of your love...

If truth be told,
my entire being, my life,
is on a hold.
Bereft of you, I am barren,
I am living dead...
Just like my heart, dying,
without "you", it's rhythm, it's beat,
Losing the red...

Reviews

[Just Kim]

This is so wonderful,
I love the different colors in words.
Gives off a more expression in your piece,
Nicely written.

[barricade]

Thankyou for your kind words...I'm glad you liked it :)

[Brave girl]

very beautifuly done,i like the ending very classy... good job :)

[barricade]

Thankyou dear... Glad you liked it :)

[Brave girl]

you're the most welcome

[Brianna Brie]

Awl, this is so classy and sweet. I love your original ending, too.

[barricade]

Im so glad you liked it :)

[shallimarRose]

Beautifully sad.. shallimarRose

[barricade]

Thank you for reading :) I appreciate your kind words...

[shallimarRose]

your welcome.. xo

[SarahV]

Lovely poem! I love the use of colours to reinforce the meaning. I thinki the second stanza is really lovely, sad but beautiful work. Keep up the good writting :)

[barricade]

Glad you liked it...thank you for taking out the time to reading my work :) it means a lot to me...

[SarahV]

Your welcone :).

[DIVYA]

When loves flies out, it takes with it the warmth, the colors and the light too.
Pain and lonliness is depicted so effectively here. Barricade, you bared your soul here.
Thanks for sharing.

[barricade]

Thank you for taking out the time to read. :)

[DIVYA]

All my pleasure.