The pen is mightier than the sword!

(The title sucks...i know...) it's about words...the so called double edged sword...versus the real sword!

The pen is mightier than the sword

and so I've been told....

 

A sword just gives you bruises and wounds,

or even a bloody death...

It just attacks you on the body

and all it gets is flesh!!!

 

But words can stab you in the heart,

striking the cores of your soul...

just tear your bare existence apart

and decapitate you on the whole !!!

 

The pen is mightier than the sword

and so I've been told....

 

It's easier to die to a sword

than to those merciless words...

I'd be happier to loose my body

than to live with a bruised soul !!!

 

The pen is mightier than the sword

and so I've been told....

 

Author's Note

just some thoughts I tried to pen down....and please help me with the title.... (-.-)

Reviews

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Hmm...This was nice let me tell you that :)
I liked the concept..Though, I've read a lot of poems with this plot but this one was very much different.
It depicts about how both the things can rupture your heart and wound your soul.
There is nothing wrong with the title too..And I think so, that changing it won't be a good idea.
Since, there is a repetition of the lines in the poem-
"The pen is mightier than the sword
and so I've been told...." Thus, changing the title to something else won't look nice :)
Overall great work :)

[17thWhitePrince]

Perhaps you should title it "Take My Body But Don't Bruise My Soul"

it is REALLY well written !!!!!!!!!!
Wonderfully penned down !!!
I liked it and it is soooo true!!!!!

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

I like the title barricade. I also like the poem. What a great metaphor; a pen and sword. yes, it's true. words are cutting, and hurt more than a sword. i've seen this type of poem written before, and I have written someting in the vein of this, but yours is so original! and the way you penned it is fresh and exciting to read. I know, exciting seems a strange word for a poem about pain, but it's true. this part is my favorite:


But words can stab you in the heart,

striking the cores of your soul...

just tear your bare existence apart

and decapitate you on the whole !!!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

true that... though emotional and physical pain can both do damage it seems the physical scars do not effect you down the line like emotional ones. Very well stated.

[♡Moon Child♡..]

This is lovely, Vin. and so very true. great write! and don't change the title, silly. It fits perfectly. ^^

[Geminair]

i really like this and its so true how much more powerful words are or can be over any weapon of choice and how it connects the fact that mental or emotion pain can be far worse than physical even though the mental pain often provokes physical pain,and your right about its easier to die by a sword or even to throw your self apron one,i think because its also easyer to accept in a lot of ways

[QuietPoet]

This was good. You expressed the feelings well. It has nice flow and I like the format and color. Nicely done.

[Jason]

Very metaphoric(which I love), and honestly I wouldn't change the title....because in all honesty, the pen is more mighty than the sword...., words hold so much more power....and that is something you have proved with this body of work.....and honestly man, you sum up what most of us here on the cafe wish to achieve or hope for....most of us are not fist fighters by any means....we let our words do our fighting for us! Great body of work man!

Jay

[Julia]

even though its just some thoughts its still a great poem and i like the title as it is, i don't think its fine the way it is but i didn't write it so i cant keep the name, only u can decide that for your self. >^_^

[Jola]

Well-written poem. Full of symbolism. stimulates the imagination. greetings

[TamiViolet]

I really agree with this notion, barricade. Words can literally be fatal, especially when they weaken one's soul....I know I never forget what people say to me, both the good and the bad........ I guess that's what makes us different from animals; they only see the good.....Humans tend to remember the times when our spirit was shot to hell and may have said and done things without thinking..... I guess the important thing is being sorry and really meaning it.....

Your work is very passionate and honest. I have experienced both..... There are actions and words that I so wish I could take back, yet there are those who have said some very, very cruel, callous things to me out of ignorance....not really knowing me and what I'm about. I guess that's it, my friend....

As humans we all make mistakes. But when we do, are they repetitive.... If so, then perhaps it's time to examine our conscience and turn the negative behavior to positive.... yes?

And let me tell you...a sword would hurt like hell.....

Highly enjoyable piece.... The title is yours and yours alone, but in my opinion, I would select something that agrees with theme yet doesn't repeat itself as you repeat this line a few times in the verse.