Take a chance on more

This is for the same guy that doesn't know how I feel.

I am now beating myself up

for letting myself like you this much

because I know you'll only let me down,

I know I'm only your friend.

 

It's the way you look through my flaws

and see the light that shines inside.

 

It's the way you pick me in a crowd to smile at

even though I'm not looking directly at you.

 

It's the way you treat me different that most everyone else.

 

It's the way you stand up for me

against people you like.

 

It's the way you say nothing

but I can almost feel what you want me to say.

 

I look at all of this

& it makes me feel so special

even though I mean nothing more to you

Than a friendship.

 

I know you really want her

but if you could look at me as more

maybe some how

I could set your heart free.

 

When she comes around

it's like I don't exist.

I wanna be that girl,

The one to make you fall in love.

 

It's the way you look through my flaws

and see the light that shines inside.

 

It's the way you pick me in a crowd to smile at

even though I'm not looking directly at you.

 

It's the way you treat me different that most everyone else.

 

It's the way you stand up for me

against people you like.

 

It's the way you say nothing

but I can almost feel what you want me to say.

Author's Note

Don't be too harsh...I know that's it's alot like everything else I write but I write for me not for someone who's reading it.

Reviews

[kitty_kelley]

Hey, I think this is a really good piece, repetition was a good way to go you really got the point across...... And I think one day, that he will realize that he has been dumb for letting you get away... :) Cheer up Becks my dear!

[Lyndsay Castro]

This is a really common sentiment with most people, so bascially anyone can relate to it, and that is definitely good. I like how you use specificiy to make your point. It makes it a good read as well as poignant.

[Michael X]

Nicely done, really captures the emtoion as well as the ambition.
a well constructed poem full of those kind of images that creates memories,
as life goes on, the title is fitting, this poem really speaks to the reader
Take care, Mike

[John Stussy]

Well written, hopefully he'll open his eyes and see what you want him to see.

[Michael Carr]

a heartfelt and touching piece. very well written.
a hard feeling I know, but one nearly all of us feel now and then.
great work miss cake. :)

[Mr. Lopez]

What a tough place to be in life and in love. Just the friend but bursting from inside for so much more. Your heart desires to scream what your mouth will not let you.As you sit on the side lines watching and hoping that you will be called to play just one play. If only he could see what your heart could do for him. We men can be so blind sometimes.


Mr.Lopez

[An owl on the moon]

Your words here are so lyrical in quality, I can almost hear music when I read them... Such a devoted sense of love and friendship that may only sustain you for a time or may lead to a deeper friendship as the days go on... Whichever it is tomorrow, I hope you find what your heart needs to get you through today... This is so beautiful!

Craig

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Oh it is so tough when you have a friendship that means more to you then someone else... I think this is a great release of you emotions... you should write how you feel and I can see your genuine emotions pouring out and that makes this a wonderful piece.