Kissing You

I didn't really write this about anyone...

First Kiss,

Your lips on mine.

Hand in hand,

fingers intertwined.

 

You make me melt

like a candle

burning bright

like I burn for you.

Author's Note

Nothing's perfect,Don't be too harsh please!

Reviews

[Mr. Lopez]

There is electric magic in that first kiss. Almost addicting. This has the feel of a haiku. Nice work , i really liked it.

Mr.Lopez

[Lyndsay Castro]

Short and sweet, just like you! I love the precise words you use, it makes it effective using the minimum. It works well.

[An owl on the moon]

Simply beautiful, perfect in your ability to capture the essence of that first kiss (so electric). Wonderful work!

Craig

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Nothing like that first kiss, your poem is excellent.

[Sarah]

I like it - it's short, simple, and yet says so much about love & all the emotion that comes with it. Nice job! =)

[Michael Carr]

very sweet cupcake.
the last four lines are extreamly sweet and wonderfully witty.
very nice work again, really enjoyed it.

[BluesForTheRisingSun]

Short but sweet, I like it!