Vacant space

Vacant space

A Poem by beckyflowa

Often times
I wonder
I ponder
I explore
But never leaving my seat

Often times
I create,
initiate
I make
But it never leaves the front door

Often times
I hope
I slope
I cry
But I never get the help

Often times
I stay
I grey
I wither
But never show my mold

To others I'm vibrant
To others I'm clear
To others I'm happy
But to me I'm not here

© 2016 beckyflowa


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Very succinct and self-exploring. I really enjoyed the structure and the specific word-choice you embraced to convey such a specific feeling. I think the use of a bit more complex phrases would more accurately capture the magnitude of the feeling you are referring to, yet that is more of a personal preference. Overall a great and thoroughly expressive poem.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

beckyflowa

7 Years Ago

Thank you for reading. I completely agree, my poetry could definitely improve!



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I can't get over how good this is! Wods can't simply describe it. Especially the final two stanzas! O - M - freaking - G! Way - to - Go! Very much enjoyed every aspect of this! Well done!

Posted 6 Years Ago


Very succinct and self-exploring. I really enjoyed the structure and the specific word-choice you embraced to convey such a specific feeling. I think the use of a bit more complex phrases would more accurately capture the magnitude of the feeling you are referring to, yet that is more of a personal preference. Overall a great and thoroughly expressive poem.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

beckyflowa

7 Years Ago

Thank you for reading. I completely agree, my poetry could definitely improve!

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Added on April 25, 2016
Last Updated on April 25, 2016
Tags: Self help, emptiness, poetry, sad

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beckyflowa
beckyflowa

dublin, Ireland



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hello i'm becky, i use this website as mainly a store for poems i write but please do take a look and review them, feedback would be nice:) also if you have any tips on poem or short story writing, .. more..

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