Trainwreck

virgin white slowly fading
darkness won’t come soon enough
midnight musings

smoky bars and jukebox lovers
tequila solace
twirling dance floors

mascara teardrops
hidden under neon moons

little liar
failure aging
short shirt
designer purse

head turning
dressed to kill

myself

Reviews

[Devons]

This is the image of a girl you see at a nightclub, dancing away blithely, seemingly full of life and beauty, ...but hiding the contradictions which linger and bubble underneath the superficiality. She is the "virgin white slowly fading", the pure, pretty little angel, the daddy's girl. But she has a "darkness" that "won't come soon enough"; an inexplicable self-destructive nature which leads her to places and things that were never meant for her assumed perfection and purity.. In the "smoky bars" with the "jukebox lovers", seeking something but finding only "tequila solace" and disillusionment, reflected in her "mascara teardrops" ... The resulting "Trainwreck".
The "little liar" is perhaps the story of many a girl in this modern culture of entertainment, mate-seeking, and soul-searching that goes on day after day, week after week. But its continuance, and discovering nothing, goes on asking a question that maybe has no answer..but then she perhaps does not know the right question..."failure aging" is the result through the years; a reflection of herself, endless, like a self-fulfilling prophecy of her meaning in life. Yet she can still be "dressed to kill" and still provoke the "head turning"...
A tragically real little cameo of a life, concisely and precisely portrayed; a somehow twisted yet common perspective that represents to me an intended fairy tale gone wrong.

[Dakota]

Great imagery hun!

[Vanna Renee]

The loose ends of this poems scares me...
As though this were to really happen.
I like how you have no real design format.
Very great,
The only advice I could give is to go further into this... deeper.
Leave it off as you did, but give more explaination.

[paul]

wow. really excellent title that somehow doesn't fit but actually fits perfectly.
short powerful lines. excellent imagery.

[josh]

very good

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this is wonderful, your imagery is very good, with such little given away..well penned

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

smoky bars and jukebox lovers
tequila solace
twirling dance floors

my favorite lines... we all hide a certain of amount of pain behind the way we present our selves.

[Krista Harris]

"mascara teardrops
hidden under neon moons"
LOVE IT! You are a master of imagery!

[Fran Marie]

An intense and poweful piece of poetry

so well expressed with deep emotions springing forth.....

[Voice]

Very deep. You set the mood well and the way it is written is very elegant. I can see the setting of this poem perfectly and I really enjoyed reading it as sad as it was. Great write!!

Voice

[Steve]

I like this style of write.......This scene described brings back some nice memories.