Her Answer......

When we're together I fly so high
That I could tickle the whole sky,
Caressing clouds while in the rain,
With you I find I have no restraint.

Flying high in a hot air balloon.
On a one way trip to the moon.
Down to earth... into outer space,  
Always traveling in your embrace.

Dancing and teasing the seashores
A taste of your lips, my spirit soars.
Riding with you, my world is complete  
Rotating around your every heartbeat.

 Adventure and passion we will add to life
Yes my darling, I will be your wife.

 

 

Reviews

[Carole]

This is beautiful Brenda...

Adventure and passion we will add to life
Yes my darling, I will be your wife.

Wishing you and Jack the very best! Jackie will be very blessed to have such a wonderful lady for a step mom. I always loved that kid. Was such a nice young man, and now he is not so young any more, but you know-it's funny-He hasn't changed that much. Just looks like an older "Jackie." Tell Jack "Hello" from us and tell him congrats as well!

Carole XO

[Emily Elizabeth]

An amazing, lovely sweet poem, with touches of light humor and emotion. The imagery was fantastic, I love the way you incorporated nature into this. It actually reminded me of a song verse, the flow had that kind of rhythm and style to it. A very pretty piece!

[Phil Sanders]

Absolutely lovely .... was that in response to a proposal?

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This piece zings along with the strings of your carefree heart Brenda, I loved it! It is a proposal acceptance speech with merit and worthy of praise. How beautiful it is to read such realistic prose. The red rosebud is a wonderful touch.
Restrain...restraint?
Cheers,
Helen :-)))

[Ladysue]

I agree this poem is extremely playful which I loved most about the entire piece. The imagery was superb! This poem is beautifully outstanding!

[Catrinka]

awww such a sweet poem! I love the airy feel - Kudos!

[Brianna Brie]

Love this poem. It is light and airy. One that makes you want to become part of the story. Original, fresh and breathtaking...need I go on?

[Adela Muresan]

Ohhhh :) I loved it .Cheers !

You got a real talent for romantic poetry, I think � too bad I'm to caught up in reality, in order to feel and express such intense feelings.

[Dominick]

I can only hope to be on the recieving side of such a poem. Whomever it was intended, is lucky. I can still picture a world rotating around a beating heart. In certain spots the rhyming seemed forced ... or.. more Hallmark like, for lack of a better discription but, overall, well done.

[Dead Angel]

how lovely! very sincere and your metaphors are fantastic. the rhyming did seem a little forced but it was a good write and read. well done! :)