Poem – She Danced

She danced in the rain

The drops were

Mixed with shards of glass

As she fell a charm bracelet

Escaped her grasp

Laying on the street

Beside her but inches from her hand

A stream of water

With tints of red

That shows a slight shimmer

Against the colorless snapshot

Empty eyes open

But cannot see

As her right shoe sits

As if dangling

With only the top of her foot

Still inside

As the air of life

And death collide

Barely noticed by

The passers by

How can this be

A life not mourned

Or even just treated respectfully

Once just a glimmer

In an eye

Now a soon to be memory

Over which pain will be felt

Causing many a mourner to cry

Or at least one can hope

One can hope

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Priscilla Sayers]

Such a sad story and a beautifully poetic piece of imagery. Like the shot in a movie. That one moment where the audience feels the compassion to mourn for the character with no one to mourn their death and leaves them to wonder if anyone every celebrated thier life. Great work!

[Birdman313]

great poem

[John Jackson (El Juero)]

Very well composed story. Humans can be so callous. You painted a vivid picture here. Nice!

[Ruth]

We all hope we are remembered and what will be left, such a beautiful expression of dwelling on life/death..lovely xoxo

[Me]

Compellingly written.

[Hayley]

I agree with Lily Mae. This poem conveys the feeling we have of if we have touched the lives of any one person. I like the first stanza best. I think it is absolutely beautiful and your wordage gives the piece true justice.
Excellent piece!

[TWISTED NIGHTMARE]

DAMN, such a strong poem, with so many emotion... " empty eyes open;but cannot see" fav line

[Lily Mae]

This is so interesting. I've had moments in my life where I wonder if any one would notice if I were gone. Do we touch the lives of anyone? I hope at the end of it all that I have at least that one mourner... You have penned these emotions well..x

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Written with sad imagery, the reader can feel her misery and pain!