The Master and the Fool

Salvation?!
The killer takes too much credit!
For I played my cards intended so!
To give you the chance at it!
Point and laugh to know!
I read you like a book!
And wore my best poker face yet!
Point and laugh the fool!
Carry the grace though I’m cruel!
Ask yourself what do you truly know!
Simply strings I’ve decided to pull!
This stray won’t be had!
I broke because I can!
Sure I’m lost. I am not found!
But who thought themself the master was the fool!
As who was thought the fool had the crown!
You're being stupid. Plain and simple!
Rolling in the mud screaming to be clean!
Your freedom's a joke. Your cage is of no use to me!
No savior can you find!
Lest you ever look inside!

Reviews

[Raef C. Boylan]

Some great comparative lines here, such as:

"I read you like a book!
And wore my best poker face yet!"

"Rolling in the mud screaming to be clean!"

I normally dislike exclamation marks in poetry, but you overused them so much that they became nondescript, like fullstops or wallpaper...acceptable. Interesting approach. I guess their purpose is to show the narrator's passion/anger/volume etc?

This is an intriguing piece, as the reader doesn't know the details of the situation, but can tell what the narrator thinks of the person/people that he is addressing, so we wonder what happened...

Pretty cool write.

"As who was thought the fool had the crown!"
[suggest re-ordering: 'As was who' or 'As was he who'? Just an idea - it didn't seem to quite make grammatical sense]

Thanks for posting this.

[AG]

"I read you like a book!
And wore my best poker face yet!"

entertaining and exquisite lines!

this poem is so laid-back and at the same time very artistic.

well-done!

[Duane Klinger]

wow. . .sorry I've just got to reviewing this. This was a great piece full of emotion, awesome word choice, it kept me interested until the end and the flow made it easy to read. Very, very good

[lorrainelobotomy]

definitely a very cool poem :]