BLaTtAv3lli (Mattavelli- Ft.BLitZ3D)

BLaTtAv3lli (Mattavelli- Ft.BLitZ3D)

A Poem by BLitZeD
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Mattavelli- Ft.BLitZ3D

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BLaTtAv3lli 
Mattavelli & BLitZ3D

Car bombs shake a city to the brink. 
Generals analyze it and think
It's time to go to war. 
Leave there entire race extinct
Church bells shake inside 
Their strategy they rethink
Machine guns rattle in the streets.
A bullet cares not whom it meets.
It's gruesome work is done.
Bleeding sons lay dead like cattle from the heat
The pin f*****g pull it, flying chunks of meat 
Hoodlums and I.E.D's lead a reluctant retreat
Missiles launch from ships at sea;
Who is there that honestly
Can say what's right and wrong.
Drones approach, through the air silently 
Waiting they stare, just waiting but they're there
Out of sight but bombs range long
All nations join the game.
The world is not the same.
It hits us all at home
A military police state
Our flag in flames
An outcome we should have known 
With a flash of light
No one's left to fight. 
A city's turned to dust.
An explosion of pearls
The harbor it rusts
Hiroshima reincarnated, the actions of flight
No more ideals.
No more appeals.
Just burn the whole thing down.

The radiations real
The isotopes peel
Turned into a nuclear playground 

© 2015 BLitZeD


Author's Note

BLitZeD
Mattavelli-- http://www.writerscafe.org/mattavelli

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The geniuses that decide to go to war
Are fools

War should come to you
And you should do everything in your power to avoid it

And when all fails
You put your fist up and throw the punch

After doing so
Feeling oh my god what have i done

Posted 4 Years Ago


Whoa
So effective "No one's left to fight. A city's turned to dust."
Brought tears to my eyes!
Well written!


Posted 4 Years Ago


A great piece of writing about the futility and pointlessness of war. I thought it was very thought-provoking. i especially liked the imagery about the bullet not caring who it meets- it shows that everyone is a victim of war

Posted 4 Years Ago


Line 6 there needs to be Their. And Line 17 They're there.

This is a great social commentary on the state of the world and how quickly we let things escalate to the point of total destruction.
The two of you did a great job collaborating on this. It's very cohesive and does not lose focus or direction.


Posted 4 Years Ago


BLitZeD

4 Years Ago

ya i suck at spelling and grammar lol. thank you much for your review and help
I like the meaning a lot!
Great job both of you!

Posted 4 Years Ago


BLitZeD

4 Years Ago

thanks alot
I love the words and the descriptions and just that whole thing really. It was so powerful and truthful. It's kind of frightening but it's a very good piece. Keep writing!

Posted 4 Years Ago


BLitZeD

4 Years Ago

thank you , very glad u liked it
Excellent approach to this type of topic. Not easy to write on honestly.

Posted 4 Years Ago


BLitZeD

4 Years Ago

thank u sir
Really great doom-laden words here! I just have a few grammar issues. 2nd stanza, last line, should be "Their strategy they rethink".
3rd stanza last line-"It gruesome work is done" instead of "it's"
6th stanza 2nd line- "Waiting they stare, just waiting but they're there" instead of "there their"
Great write!


Posted 4 Years Ago


BLitZeD

4 Years Ago

thank you very much for your review n help
Emily

4 Years Ago

You're welcome!
Wow the two of you really painted a good picture here...your words so descriptive. ...so we'll conveyed. ...This is a great piece by the to of you and an awesome topic ...well done :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


micky

4 Years Ago

Haha so funny blitz :P
BLitZeD

3 Years Ago

Miss mouse ;)
micky

3 Years Ago

Miss u to lol....
excellent writing my two friends, you took us from street fighting to nuclear war in the blink of a pen, a stunning but frightening future that beckons us to find it, unless we turn away now, great write :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


BLitZeD

4 Years Ago

thank you sir

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