Empty Pockets

Saturday night,neon lights,

All money is good here,except no fights.

Ladies in waiting,

No masturbating..

Please.

Drinks are free..for a small fee.

Hand stops me short,

check's my shoes,

Your money is good,don't spend it on the food.

N*****s and hair,flailing..everywhere,

Whisky is spilt without a care.

Door man is pissed,I guessed he missed me.. again

End of the night,as promised,a fight,

Strippers are crying,inside I'm dying.

Alone in the street,who will I meet?

My shadow,my only true friend.

He's tall and he's black and never answer's back.

Same again next week,you betcha Jack!

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed the poem. I like those dark places where you can fit in and not be seen. I like the story in the poem. Took me back to wild and good places. I did like the ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Bob Sherunkle]

Thanks Coyote,appreciate the time

[EloisaWrites]

This one makes me 'haha'. I don't know if it's fit to say it made me smile. Also, I don't know if it is fit that I think there is some humor. The place is dark, I know. And the heart of the narrator felt darker and sadder. But your arrangement is really entertainingly good and realistic and cunning. I love every bit of it. Including the chaos of the place and the chaos of the heart. Thank you. :)

[justjenn_2u]

I danced the greed pole. This poem allows me to exude some strange respect. The flow unites the closure. Good read.

[Bob Sherunkle]

Many Thanks!

[Raymond Federle]

Wonderfully poignant. You really know how to capture real life Bob. :)

[Bob Sherunkle]

Thanks Raymond,much appreciated.Been offline for a while..other sh*t to deal with.Hopefully be back soon.thanks again man.

[gombeggar]

has an interesting rhythm and a very glam rock/punk style 2 it

[Bob Sherunkle]

Thanks for reading,much appreciated!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Great imagery and frank description, a joy to read, well done.

[Bob Sherunkle]

Hey thanks Thomas!Thanks for reading

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

your welcome.

[Trevor Barnett]

An awesome write Bob about the bar life or going to the local strip joint.

[Bob Sherunkle]

Hey Trevor,thanks man,bit of both!

[Moebia]

Loved this... hahaha I could picture it all. xD

[Bob Sherunkle]

Thanks Moebia,thanks for reading

[Jay Steitler]

Gritty, and underpinnings of drama. Loved it. Took my mind off this migraine. I Just might have a drink, lol!

[Bob Sherunkle]

Thanks Jay,hope your migraine has gone!

[Jay Steitler]

Slowly it turned...

[Bob Sherunkle]

I hope you can keep it a bay.Have a wonderful Christmas and I look forward to your work in the new year.Take care buddy.

[Jay Steitler]

Thanks, I plan on being around. Merry Christmas. You too. pal!

[Bob Sherunkle]

I f******** hope so!

[TheGreatAndPowerful]

Very raw, it paints a vivid picture of something not so pretty which is not something you see a lot when it comes to poetry.
Very good write!

[Bob Sherunkle]

thank you very much,kind words