Powerless

When you have no power to fix things

To hear them say that it’s over, that they don’t want to be with you anymore

It’s like a knife to your chest, you feel your heart drop to the floor

Nothing else matters, because your empty, you feel a hole in your soul

You feel used and dirty worse than an old clump of coal

How you can continue in life, you’ve no clue, because nothing has answers

The whole thing is awful, and everyone tiptoes around you like dancers

Because no one wants to deal with you, to help you with your pain

You become a mindless zombie, and act as though you have no brain

And in the end, it doesn’t make a difference, you knew it wouldn’t last

While the person you loved was next to you, time passed fast

Now you have no idea what is going on around you, you have to focus

But you can’t do it, it’s like your under a spell of slowness

Reviews

[emipoemi]

........wow! Lengthy lines and musicalities are relatively hard to pull off, but you do it superbly here, and weave through the piece a very powerful message. Love it! My only critique is that "mindless" should be switched out for another word, as it means having "no brain" which would thus make the second part of that line redundant and undermining. Other than that, absolutely fantastic! Well done!

[StolenSaphireWitch]

Thank you for the feedback. I often times just write how I feel in the moment, and most times only go over it once or twice, therefore leaving a few errors. But your advice is very helpful, and I will take it to heart.

[emipoemi]

glad I could be of service.