thoughts

here again i stand

shadows and darkness ingulf my soul

cries can no longer be heard

 

i stand in silence

just waiting for your return

but i know you wont come for me

 

your selfishness and foolishness

im fed up with it

so what? ive given up hope 

like someones realy gonna come along and take me away

 

 

 

Author's Note

:P -athena

Reviews

[Silverwing]

Again, I like it. Although, like I said in my last comment I gave you, I'm not a poetry critic, I can't help feeling left hoping for more. Its interesting because the speaker is saying, "I've given up hope," and yet the reader is longing for more. The reader wants to know what path the speaker is going to take because many paths are imagined yet only one can be traveled at a time.

"I know you won't come for me" - There's something profound about that statement. We, as people, tend to hold some kind of expectation for the others around us and when those expectations aren't met we become disappointed. Obviously something has happened to cause the speaker to believe that they are going to be left alone, waiting. There comes a point were we need to realize, and accept, the fact that sometimes the person we're waiting for isn't the person we need.

Very interesting thoughts. Keep writing!

[Daytonight]

Keep hanging on to your hopes and dreams. You never know who or what is just around the corner. Well done. Keep on penning.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

This was a good piece as well. I love the flow of the poem and the rhythm. It was short and to the point. I can relate to this in a way. I can feel hopelessness in the poem because you want him to acknowledge that you need him. Thanks for sharing.

[November Gold]

Never ever give up hope!

[brenda]

i like this i can relate to it nice write !:)

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Longing for someone masterfully captured here:)

[Suzy Q]

I really like this poem. :) Especially since it correlates to my life.

[Roze Collions]

like it

[CharlesMonroe]

I can really relate to this, I love it (:

[Yina]

Wow. I can feel the loneliness and rejection in this write. Amazing! This is somewhat of how I've been feeling today:/

[samurai212]

You are absoulutly amazing :D