an open prison

it's been a while since I've written anything, so this is just a humble free verse that came to my mind to express some negative energy that is rising inside me.

A maze of rage unriddled to peace,

 NO, not yet it won't!

the veins are still clogged with questions;

the face still plastic in perfection

where hands are wrinkled with frosting deficit;

the veins are still clogged with questions.

No clock, No seconds, No time

shall unclog the questions,

she needs oxygen of another planet to freshen up

she'll climb to stars if she'll have to.

No dreams,No hopes, No faulty imaginations,

the hazy truth is floating around,

while everyone is blinded by sluggish,

flecks of mumbling thoughts are imprinting the maps of

resolution from within:

she'll fight the ordinary and settles for the unknown

for she may embodies freedom in the unknown.

Reviews

[Avinash]

In your writing I always notice a loud cry for freedom. I just pray for it that it happens soon.

[Latifa]

thank you for the review

[Mayank]

Very intellectual... the first line was huge blow.

[Latifa]

thank you for the review

[Baby Ricochet]

You gotta look out for those sluggish flecks of mumbling. They get stuck on your glasses and you can't get them off

[Latifa]

thank you for the review

[wordman]

wow you painted a vivid picture here great job glad to see you writing

[Latifa]

thank you for the review

[Briana O'Connor]

This is a beautiful free verse, indeed. The way your heart poured onto the page was flawless. This piece had a deep sense of emotion. I could envision a story unfolding within the winding of words. One little critique is that some of the tenses seemed to be mixed up. Nothing that can't be fixed later. Thank you for sharing.

[Latifa]

thank you for the review

[Alfred Kukitz]

What makes your poetry excellent is the juxtaposition of ideas like veins clogged with questions, the face still plastic in perfection. Now take that sweeping intellect of yours, invent your idea and wow happens. I really do believe Latifa you are an excellent writer. Most if not all of your material blows me away. Nice work!

[Latifa]

thank you for the review Alfred, I really appreciate it...:)...