Beneath A Full Moon

 

On a winter’s eve, cold and clear

Beneath a bright full moon

Seeking answers to my troubles

Needing to find them soon

 

I stood and looked into the woods

Feeling quite forlorn

When from the trees emerged a vision

A gorgeous unicorn

 

He nudged me gently with his head

Offering his horn

With wonder I touched it with my hand

And knew I’d been reborn

 

In quiet awe I watched him leave

Back the way he came

Knowing that from this day on

Nothing would be the same

 

I walked into my empty house

In relative good cheer

Magic had happened here this night

To ring in a New Year

Reviews

[Rhiannon Dragonraine]

Wow you capture the wonder of the night of the full moon perfectly. I have to admit as a writer there are a few things that I seem at a loss for words when wanting to describe them and one of those is the magic and etheral feeling of blue moonlit rays on new fallen snow- there is so much more to said about the aura it creates and yet it leaves me dumbfounded but you- you write about it and make it seem so right and make the creating of the vision seem so effortless. Amazing!

[Closed profile]

Beautifully written
The rhyming and flow is very good, the flow could eb better in the end of the poem (but it's not anything you need to change, because it is still very magical and beautiful as it is now)

I love magical poems, fantasy, I just lvoe it and this one made me yearn for experiencing such things.

Who wouldn't wish to meet a unicorn

My favourite is

I stood and looked into the woods
Feeling quite forlorn
When from the trees emerged a vision
A gorgeous unicorn

The flow and rhming is just perfect in this verse

Beautiful

[Melody P-]

this is beautiful**
from time to time have a dream similar..
I awake..and oh how I wish it weren't a dream..lol
this is very well written and was beautifully smooth..
this first stanza was a beautiful beginning and the ending, "To ring in a New Year" great conclusion!

[G D Howard]

Hopefulness born out of dispair! I like this very much. Good job.

[Jessica Benfield]

this is such a very beautiful piece, absolutely breathtaking!!! ^-^ this is wonderful, and i wish everyone a happy new year also! ^-^

[Jillian Alexis]

Once again, you have penned a beautiful poem with your' talented hand! This is full of hope, and lent to me a feeling of hope. Thank you for sharing this with us all. May your' New Year be all and more, than you ever hoped it to be...Hugz...Jillian

[Laughing Lunatic]

Beautifully enchanting I loved the way this was woven together my favorite things winter, magic and miracles. Happy New Year!! = )

[Emily B]

Miracles and magic are always welcome for a new year. I loved the flow of this write! Happy New Year to you, too.

[Spoken]

An enchanting write. I'd love to think the world is full of fairy tales coming true.. we all need a lil' magic in our lives! It's a great life changing experience when something special happens to us. Happy New Year.

[Melony Clarke]

Excellent just excellent. Thanks I spend a lot of time under full moons.

[Brette Medb]

See I told you Unicorns only come out in the Mountains on a Full Moon lol...

This is a wonderful New Years Wish and I hope you find your unicorn.



Brette