them.

them.

A Poem by corbin

Them

 

I TRY TO BE SOMEONE.

but someone is no one.

 

I TRY TO BE GLAMOURIZED

but i just get critizized.

 

I WANNA BE ONE

but i am not that dumb.

 

I WANNA WIN

but i simply overdid.

 

I WANT TO BE BRITTLE

but i just have a little

 

I WANT SOMEONE TO LISTEN

but they just dont hear.

 

I DONT WANT THE FAME

I DONT WANT THEM

i wander what would happen

 

 

HA; id proabbly be sane.=D

© 2008 corbin


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corbin
idk. just lemme know what you think

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I liked it alot/. I t kinda reminds me of me. I get the part about being critized really well.

Posted 15 Years Ago


I liked this alot. It reminded me of how I used to try to be on of the preps, but (obviously) it didn't work out!

What gets my attention the most is the message, that even though we try to be what we're not, we never could be. Even if we do, we would be sane! What's a life without craziness??? Another thing I loved in here is is when you say:

I want to be someone
but someone is no one

those lines really struck me down to the core. I mean, what more than a poser is someone who seems to be it all? I am really surprised to see this come out of you, because I would have never guessed you had it in you. I was wrong though, you are great!

~may

Posted 15 Years Ago



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CORBIN i am soon to be fourteen october 7th softball is the sport i play it all the time i am nice to everyone and try not to get annoying i laugh all the time and try to have a smile on my face. i be.. more..

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