If...

If I stood
At the top of the highest building
Would you come?
Do I deserve to change my mind?

If I leapt
Took off to reach unmoving concrete
Would you reach out?
Do I deserve to be alive?

If I fell
Both wind and heartbeat quickly racing
Would you catch me?
Do I deserve to escape my fate?

And if you did
Embrace me in that final grasp
Would it be right?
Or would we both deserve to die?

Author's Note

This piece reflects the thought of leaping, not necessarily into death or suicide, but into depression or giving up on oneself. Often times, suffering ones yearn for someone to pull them back and tell them that they deserve to be happy, or to live, but at the same time they wonder if being saved was the "right" thing to do. Maybe they didn't deserve it. Anyhow, just thoughts. :) Comment.

Reviews

[Senseless whatever]

Great write. vivid and thought provoking. I like the perspective of this piece. Questions leading to more questions. Self doubt the overriding emotion, so strong in fact that even ones salvation is in question.

[~Xx Fallen Angel xX~]

You are a very talented writer. I love how you made this relate to your readers. Great write.

[Rory CJ Frankson]

Yikes... you ok? Ah ya I'd reach out, an have.
I'd miss you! Good vibe sent your way... Ro.
Love Light an Happiness, is always worth the try.
"If"... we surf, through clear blue sky. :) Always well written you!

[Tina Kline]

The 'I'm not quite sure' of wanting to give up or not to give up, that conflict within our minds and hearts.

[Dimples87]

I can relate to this in this sense of suffering and the need to feel that you're not alone. It's what each and everyone of us wants. I love the way you made the move through a poem to reach out for someone to be with you, to appear vulnerable, and reach out for help.

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This is a terrific poem. I love the feeling of faith it gave me.
I somehow felt that this person is loved enough to be snatched
away from that ledge. This is a sad piece, but I feel that is person
is very special to someone.

[Norma M Sutton]

The confliction in this supports what you are trying to say. It works :)

[Natalie]

This was so extremely beautiful. Sooo emtional and breath taking. I'm not just saying.It was a great topic and there was a great flow. Really liked this great job :D

[Coyote Poetry]

When you care for someone. There is no limit what you will do for someone. I like this poem. We need to know we are needed and wanted. I like the ending. Always good to end with a question. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Desert Dreamer]

I answer yes to all these questions...we all deserve to be happy.