Unfair World

Unfair World

A Poem by A.Lee

 

The sands just kept on trickling down

Falling steady through the glass

Hours turned to days, to weeks

With no concern for what has passed

 

How dare the clock continue ticking?

How dare the grass live on and grow?

How dare the world continue moving?

Why did the wind not cease to blow?

 

One month ago a light went dark

A steady beat forever silenced

A set of lungs refused to breathe

A little voice forever quiet

 

We’re told that memories suffice

Or that in time he’ll breathe again

But it’s the waiting in between

That turns the sun to endless rain

 

More than one heart stopped that day

It stands there frozen at the scene

Just yesterday my love was here

Just yesterday the grass was green

 

But time kept moving, so disloyal

A traitor to survivors grieving

Darkened glares against the clock

And I just stand there, disbelieving

 

So while the world remains in motion

I’ll stay where I saw him last

Ignore the racing minute hand

How dare the clock tick on so fast?

 

For just a while, I’m hiding here

Bathing in sweet memories

I still don’t want it to be real

So unfair world, don’t wait for me

© 2011 A.Lee


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I have favourited this poem as it is so passionate and emotional and painful. Time goes on, even when those we love do not. To live having lost is unbearable, and anger at the world--and at the clock for ticking--is a very human experience. I hope you found some solace in writing. Grief is a terrible and hideous thing to go through. Your use of metaphor and rhythm is very specific and makes for a lovely read.

Posted 7 Years Ago


wow.....this drips with emotion and pain....but not only that, it is a GREAT write about some of the greatest obstacles - time and death. you captured my thoughts with this - you wrote my heart with this....excellent write. THX!

Posted 9 Years Ago


loved the ending..
"For just a while, I’m hiding here
Bathing in sweet memories
I still don’t want it to be real
So unfair world, don’t wait for me"..
pain is so eloquent in your writing. thanks for sharing.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Your poems always surprise me with their tenderness, their honesty, n' their undying hope in the face of darkness. N' this is the best crafted one I've yet read, full of brokenhearted graudeur.....BEAUTIFUL! XXXXX

Posted 9 Years Ago


Heartbreaking...and as for your writing itself, you're still as usual an extremely good writer, I can't find anything that would call for changing...excellent job...

Posted 9 Years Ago


aw...that was heart renderingly beautiful and excellenty composed. Thankyou so much!

Posted 9 Years Ago


So tragic and very sad. How can anyone get over such a horrible loss? It just seems like the world just ought to stop because it feels like life has stopped after such a tragedy. I think you did a really wonderful job on your poem here.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Oh so sad, so melancholy and full of feeling. so right! How dare that clock go on ticking! How dare life continue as though my grief means nothing! Your writing is powerful. leaves me so saddened. what talent.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Good work and keep it up and I love it

Posted 9 Years Ago


Don't have time to write a long review but basically good job, you did good conveying your mind and expressing yourself. Get back to you soon.
Peace and One Love
-Demetri J

Posted 9 Years Ago



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