Into the Waves

I came to a shore

shivering as the sea poured over my feet

I felt the waves become me

yet as I glanced behind

back at the cracked pavement of the road

the scratched mountain cliffs

the falling petals

the browning leaves

my heart began to sink

drowning in the tide of the colored memories

but when I saw the sun set upon the bay

and brush the waves with the hues my heart held onto

I knew that it was time to plunge into the water

and so I jumped, never looking back

letting my heart tango with the end of the day

savoring the taste of the dance.

Reviews

[BetanuZwei]

This was really interesting and intriguing to read. We all associate different emotions with the water. Good job

[Tracie D'Angelo]

Ooooo, great visual! I love the way the words dance with each other and just swirl together. I can almost feel this poem as I read it. Another great poem to read aloud! Great job!

[Clockwork]

I liked the perspective that you give your speaker in this poem. The descriptions feel like they would come from a character in a novel or a short story. They are crisp and clean, and they direct the reader to the exact destination the character is going in.

I really liked the line "and brush the waves with the hues my heart held onto" I really think that line showed a deeper poetic undercurrent in this piece. I think that line was a great setup to how the poem ended overall.

[shoaib]

really awesome work
love the descriptions and imagery

[Liza]

my favorite line...

letting my heart tango with the end of the day

[N. Hadley]

Some wonderful imagery here, nice job.

[Jonathan]

The see reminds of better times a place of serenity
And tranquility. Taking a swim, leaving the turmoil
and ugliness behind. To simply forget about those troubling matters
And to cleanse the soul for a better tomorrow.

[Richard Williams]

Good imagery with the feelings blended with the water and the waves. A nice picture.

[Tim]

I really liked this, it was done very well. Good job.

[Mauricio Montoya]

I can relate to this peace in many ways, the beach is where I find piece to sort out, think, but never plunge,( can’t swim, lol) yes I look back sometimes but in front is this vast sea with an never ending horizon which lets me there’s more to life than the small things.
Great job!