Priced In Pain

Priced In Pain

A Poem by Chris Shaw
"

some things are worth a bit of discomfort

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A label on my home preserve
reminded me that I had picked
plump, ripened fruit of blackberries
from thorny brambles which had pricked
and stained my skin deep purple-red.

Unfriendly was the Sunday heat
that scorched my shoulders, left them sore,
yet still I stayed avoiding bees
and gathered many, many more
which hung from clusters overhead.

Though blistered fruit was free to pluck
I paid the price in reaper's pain,
but in the dreary winter months,
my autumn harvest proved a gain.
Delicious jam for months ahead,
I thickly spread on buttered bread.

© 2018 Chris Shaw


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One of the things I miss most in this world is my grandmothers (both) homemade jams. as a kid i would join my cousins when sent out to collect wild raspberries from the fields and along the riverbanks where they grew in abundance. by the time we returned not a berry left for miles. we ate as many as we delivered, but neither grandmother ever seemed to hold that against us, and all winter long I'd dream of the next year's summer visit, the wild berries and homemade jams.

want to thank neville for digging this gem out from your archives, and you Chris for the trip down memory lane

ken

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Chris Shaw

1 Year Ago

Many thanjs Ken. Since the demise of the damson tree, I haven't made jam. I also used to make greeng.. read more



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Good afternoon Christine, have you an extensive library of unpublished gems or are you busy beavering away writing new ?
Nothing free comes without some sort of pay back.


Posted 6 Years Ago


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Gee

6 Years Ago

Ahhh, and there lis the difference. You take your time to produce decent I scribble and post in the .. read more
Chris Shaw

6 Years Ago

Chance would be a fine thing. Lucky if I can grab an hour or so to do my own thing.
Gee

6 Years Ago

Tut,tut....I'm just grabbing a cuppa then back to it. Have a good afternoon
Harvesting good fruit is never free even when it's free. And like hard earned knowledge it can have many, many long term applications.

Brambles is a beautiful but underused word.

I like how you subtly juxtapose things. The pain of harvest, the delight and usefulness of the realization of that harvest... The berries in this poem could be any number of things.


Posted 6 Years Ago


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Chris Shaw

6 Years Ago

Thank you David for your thoughtful response, much appreciated.

Chris
This poem could also serve a great vehicle for metaphor (though it might be perennial already). The simple pleasure of picking berries, making jam, eating through the colder months; the self sufficient satisfaction comes through unadulterated and still with appeal.
"I paid the price in reaper's pain" is my favourite line. Loving the alliteration and rhythm in that one: each device amalgamates sweetly there.

Posted 6 Years Ago


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Chris Shaw

6 Years Ago

Thanks charlie for your thoughts which I appreciate very much.

Chris
Sweeter for the pain. What a great read! Home made jam a treat that always reminds me of my gran. Many mahalo.

Posted 6 Years Ago


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Chris Shaw

6 Years Ago

Smiling at you because my Nan taught me to make jam. Pleased you enjoyed the read.

Ch.. read more
and it is worth the sacrifice for every berry picked to make a jam... it fits the saying no pain, no glory.. thanks for this writing chris

Posted 6 Years Ago


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Chris Shaw

6 Years Ago

Thank you sette, well worth the discomfort. Nothing like home-made jam.

Chris
sette

6 Years Ago

a problem for a diabetic like me..lol

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Albert, my paternal grandfather introduced me to Tennyson when I was nine. I have loved poetry ever since but did not attempt writing a single piece until I was 40. It's never too late to try somethin.. more..

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