Spirited

a faltering flame

in a room filled with darkness

fights for love of light

Reviews

[barleygirl]

What makes this especially intense for me is the title, as it relates to the content. Spirited people are often the ones who take darkness the hardest. Just look at all the artists & musicians that die young. You've captured the essence of haiku/senryu perfectly: (1) expression thru imagery & (2) saying a ton with very few words (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Chris Shaw]

I couldn't ask for a better review on this senryu. Thank you Margie. Really appreciate you and what you do for this place.

Chris

[augustus]

LIKE A CANDLE IN THE WIND as Elton John sang. A flicker of light in this dark and troubled land
Your very brief poem did the trick Christine!

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks Augustus for checking in. A belated happy new year to you.

Chris

[augustus]

Thank you and may I wish you a super and better Year ahead of us. Stay safe!

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Augustus and you too stay safe and healthy.

[red93]

Good to see more Japanese influenced work on the Site Chris, and it is excellent - nicely metaphoric and as all these short forms should, leaving the reader to fill in the backstory.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you so much. I do like Haiku. I know they aren't everyone's cup of tea, so it delights me when they are appreciated. Many thanks for your visit.

Chris

[John the Baptist]

A moving piece here. Sometimes, when the darkness is especially pervasive, we are all faltering flames. That is when we must learn to really love the light.

[Chris Shaw]

Thanking you John and appreciating the visit. We all need the light at the moment in these dark days. All good wishes.

Chris

[adornoscousin]

This might be truth or goodness or right fighting in an indifferent world. Faltering but fighting. But the struggle is so disheartening.

[Chris Shaw]

Many thank yous fir your visit adornoscousin. Happy New year to you.

Chris

[Just Kim]

what a wonderful haiku, very nicely penned

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks for checking in Kim. All the best to you.

[Just Kim]

you too.....

[olla]

and still it struggles.. for the greatest of these is love.. Merry Christmas..

[Chris Shaw]

Merry Christmas olla and many thanks for your welcome visit.

Chris

[olla]

you are so welcome.. I appreciate your writing even when I am not fit to comment.. today is a good day for drive by greetings.. it's been a .. year.. but gentler thoughts always help in raw times.. food for the soul..

[Chris Shaw]

I really appreciate that you are reading my work even when you don't feel well enough to comment dear olla. Sending you all good wishes for a good Christmas, a better new year and a healthier one.

Chris

[Dave Brown]

this latest curtain of darkness is going to make that flames fight even more difficult

[Chris Shaw]

You aren't wrong there Dave. It's going to get worse before it gets better. All the best.
read moreYou aren't wrong there Dave. It's going to get worse before it gets better. All the best.

Chris

[Stella Armour]

Such a strong message here for all of us Chris, what a wonderful senryu to remind us that there is always light even if it seems to falter in our darkest moments.... it will always flicker in the background until the time is right for it to spread again.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Stella for that very encouraging review. Pleased you enjoyed this senryu.

Chris

[Stella Armour]

I did enjoy very much Chris and thank you ....

[Corset]

beautiful haiku, a beautiful testimony to the spirited , it brings to mind ying and yang, if we lived on the light side of the moon it would always be daytime, on the dark side always night, both equal in the balance, when there is too much of either unbalance. keep the flame burning.

[Chris Shaw]

I love your response Corset. We think alike when it comes to this Haiku. All good wishes and keep safe.

Chris

[Corset]

very cool this could be both with a human twist, the flame could be someone alone, it is a dual, very clever. pretty cool. :D