A Text Too Many

out of the blue

from the forests of time

a message was left

it would be good to talk

.

concisely short

a bullseye dart

pointed and poisoned

it grazed on my heart

.

nostalgia it carried

on a cool autumn breeze

i remembered how once

i was brought to my knees

.

so what do you want

from your fine Surrey garden

maybe the chablis is

seeking my pardon

.

on a warm afternoon

i could easily be swayed

except i recalled

i was dumped and betrayed

.

so i chose to ignore you

and didn't reply

yet not without wiping

a tear from each eye

.

Reviews

[Neville]

this is unusually good but not at all unusual .. and I don't mean that you just wrote a bloomin good bit o poetry .. its good to talk and from both a personal and professional perspective, I am acutely aware that so many problems start from the moment a silence is first conceived ..................... Neville :)

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Neville Yes silence is golden at times and deadly at others. It seems I have a propensity to keep my mouth shut when most women can't close theirs for love nor money :) I have to confess I have since spoken to the subject of this poem who was fortunate enough to be my first husband :)

Chris

[Neville]

I take it I can stand down then and a hit is no longer required :)

[Chris Shaw]

:)...............

[light and ashes]

Sad.....but at least you know your worth, good writing.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you light and ashes for stopping by.

Chris

[light and ashes]

You're welcome

[Laz K.]

What this means to me is that a breakup is never really gotten over. The scar is there, and when that text message comes, we are made conscious of it. An invisible hand moves over the invisible scar on the heart and sighs. If that love was strong enough - dangerously strong - the speaker would perhaps consider replying even though it could mean another disillusionment. I think about such situations daily, so I can relate.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Laz for your thoughts and relating to this poem. I think there is much truth in what you say here. I appreciate you stopping by.

Chris

[duff]

Memory lane with a drop of hurt and movers on the way. Dagger words hitting hard. I like it Chris.

[Chris Shaw]

Yep, you summed it up well duff. THank you for your read and the visit.

Chris

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

A haunting piece that had me wanting to know more about what caused this sadness. Though it probably is best to be left unsaid and wander in our minds. A wonderful poem Chris thank you for sharing.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Carlos. I appreciate your thoughts and you stopping by. All good things.

Chris

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Chris... your poem is so soft and emotional...
there are many stories to be told... and a breeze in a tree
can be a reminder. Finding Peace is usually under the shade
of a Tree. I wish I were more Noble; but at least... I can now
feel God's Grace in Nature. truly, Pat

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you dear Pat for stopping by. Sending love across the wsves.

Chris

read moreThank you dear Pat for stopping by. Sending love across the wsves.

Chris

[barleygirl]

Ah yes. There are always those who appear after you almost forgot what a bad decision that was. Your poem lets this unfold naturally & understandably. It has been my experience that it's always a bad idea to go back when these summons arrive (((HUGS)))

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Margie for sharing and for stopping by. You are appreciated.

Chris

[Dylan Macadham]

Hi Chris, Curious, I looked up "Chablis" for a description ... dry and sharp.
...just like his note, and I Imagine just like him, and I don't mean Sharp as Smart.
Choosing to Ignore in such a situation takes Strength, I hope you felt a tearful sense of appropriate pride in yourself and your choice :)

[Chris Shaw]

Smiling at your response and the description of chablis. An acquired taste, I never got used to. Many thanks for stopping by. Happy Friday.

Chris

[.]

Sometimes it's best to not answering any such text....when you know the outcome is zero or it will take you to that uncomfortable past once again.You know yourself best and thus you moved on ...no need to look back!

Very Nicely penned....

[Chris Shaw]

You are so right. Sometimes you can't go back over old ground. Thank you dear Sima.

Chris

[Dave Brown]

this sounds like a romance gone adrift
Too often it does bring at least one tear

[Chris Shaw]

I think we've all had broken romances to contend with. Thank you Dave. Appreciate your visit.

Chris