Mind Speak

(Spontaneous write) I don’t do love poetry

this heart of mine
hasn’t yet recovered
it still weeps for the ache
that would have quenched
its thirst

four chambers beating in conflict
with those stretched strings
in my mind
why don’t you let go
it says
why can’t you let go

snow white
do what’s right
promises aren’t made to be broken
hear that moral compass
speak out loud
the moral fibre has spoken

but still after years I weep
for the deep feelings felt
melt away moments
yes it was love though not fulfilled
an unexpected surprise
not a cheap give away token

Reviews

[1809 Black Plague Decem..]

Dear Chris Shaw,
I really like what you have to say,
the ending keeps me lingering,
great write! ---Maynard

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you so much for stopping by. Pleased you like my poem. I appreciate your thoughts Maynard. read moreThank you so much for stopping by. Pleased you like my poem. I appreciate your thoughts Maynard.

Chris

[1809 Black Plague December]

thank you, Chris, I will. :P

[John the Baptist]

Some relationships have deeper roots than others. The memories of these stay with us, even when we think we've forgotten them, and then something will bring them back to us. This seems to be what has happened here. But of course they will fade away again, until the next time.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you John for sharing your thoughts on my poem. Pleased you stopped by. Happy Monday to you. read moreThank you John for sharing your thoughts on my poem. Pleased you stopped by. Happy Monday to you.

Chris

[Davidgeo]

You're a beautiful writer. I am privileged to know that we know of each other.

[Chris Shaw]

You know, that is a really kind thing to say. You have added value to my day.

Chris

[Davidgeo]

We add value to each other through the poetry of human language. There is an existential value in that, not just the specific instance between us but the constant pursuit of finding meaning and value in communication. Being kind is the best way to do that , I wish I realized this a long time ago.

[Anita Frader]

This is beautiful, Chris. For someone who doesn't do love poetry... I'd say maybe reconsider.

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks Anita for your very encouraging response. Pleased you stopped by.

Chris

[Anita Frader]

You're very welcome 💙🙂

[jacob erin-cilberto]

You wrote a really strong love poem here.
four chambers beating in conflict...time for a bypass.
WE give love away and others getting it for free cannot even respect us enough to treat us well.
sad state there.
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you dear j. Love is not a genre I normally touch. I keep it at arm’s length. Pleased you felt this poem was one of strength.

Chris

[Poetic Beauty]

It’s hard the heart to let go of those it loves. Even if it is what is best.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you PB for stopping by. When the heart chooses, the mind can sometimes put up a fight. You can’t always get what you want. Have a happy Monday.

Chris

[Poetic Beauty]

Definitely the heart want what it wants but we don’t alway get what we want

[Neville]

Ah' but it seems that you do .. and you do it so well .. Neville

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Neville for your kind and encouraging response.

Chris

[Lorry]

This reminds me of why the caged bird sings Chris. Regrets can hold us back from seeing what we have and not making that which we have another regret in the now or the future. Some guy, I think he was called Francie had a few but still managed to do things my way. Lucky git!
The rest of us just think those feelings in quiet moments and get on with what us now. We call the rest life!
Spur of the moment write seems apt, especially on a heavy clouded Sunday.
We all have those clouded Sunday moments, don't we? Some of mine just don't know which day of the week it is!

[Chris Shaw]

Hello Lorry. Regrets, no, sadness yes. Strange how thoughts suddenly flood back from the past. Hope your day has been ok and that you are getting ready for that snow:)Keep yerself warm.

Chris

[Mauricio Montoya]

Wow Chris for something you just put together, it.deep I think its something we've all felt at one time or another, for.me this write makes.me think.of my points of depression., again for spontaneous write, you hit the nail on the head because some of us snap out of it and move forward, lol thank you for sharing this excellent write.

[Chris Shaw]

Dear Mauricio, thank you for your kind comments and for putting this write in your favorites. You are much appreciated.

Chris

[Stella Armour]

"Do the right thing" is often in conflict with what you really want to do but commitment stands in the way ...
Even years on that memory still makes your heart race ...

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you dear Stella. How right you are. A theme which no doubt will be relatable. Commitment is like a barbed wire fence lol.

Chris

[Stella Armour]

I managed to escape from mine twice Chris, never been anywhere close to one since ... but it does work 2 ways, others have their fence prisons too and you have to do the right thing for someone else..