Remnants

( I must stop watching horror films at night, this is what my muse gave me this morning)

dance on my heart dark darling
dance with your boots of black longing
dance till every drop
is drained and contaminated
with the dirt on the sole of
your loathing
dance as you have never danced before
dance with the remnants of ragged abuse
this time make sure the job is done
so the sun will set with gleeful satisfaction
so it won’t rise at daybreak
in the mourning

Reviews

[DIVYA]

This poem had a feverish pace to it and a very palpable dark side. The dance is of hate and the speaker is bitter and knowing of the other half's abusive ways. The words drip with a sarcasm. Dear Chris, as always, you spin magic with your pen and pull the reader into this very intriguing scape. One wants to see more, learn more, read more....I loved this read!

[poetgurl (Plainly Meg)]

WOW! This is so amazing! Really well expressed emotions.

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks Plainly Meg. Pleased you stopped by. Happy Saturday.

Chris

[GeeKay]

Awesome. I love this and have felt this as most probably have at some point.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you GeeKay. We all have a dark side, mine doesn’t show that often. Pleased you stopped by to share your thoughts.

Chris

[Soren]

The word painting in this mural of horror is artistic with multiple metaphors.
"dance till every drop
is drained and contaminated
with the dirt on the sole of
your loathing"
Great lines.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Soren. The artist’s paint was a bit black here, though as always I appreciate your thoughtful review. Have a hapoy Monday.

Chris

[Neville]

if I told you just how good this was, I might just frit my self .. Neville :)

[Chris Shaw]

Well I scared myself when this poured out Neville. I don’t usually do darkness, but why not once in a while:) Thank you my friend.

Chris

[Neville]

you can beat an egg etc etc but you just can't beat a bit o noir now n again .. Neville
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you can beat an egg etc etc but you just can't beat a bit o noir now n again .. Neville

[Chris Shaw]

Your French needs brushing up my friend :)

[Neville]

mange tout ..

[Ken Simm.]

Dark dancing. I love it. Dark deep dancing.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Ken. Frightened myself writing this one :) Many thanks and be sure to have a happy Sunday.

Chris

[Lore Keeper]

Wonderfully macabre, almost whimsically so. The movies that came to mind (though no dancing that I recall anyway) was the 1961 film ‘Mr Sardonicus’ and “The man who Laughs”, more so the second than the first. Who knows why my brain veered that way, other than I’m just weird I suppose. Good job as always.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Lore Keeoer, I don’t usually do dark and scary, but this one just poured forth and so I went with the flow. Have a happy Sunday.

Chris

[Lore Keeper]

You’re welcome, I don’t get to review as often as I would like but look forward to seeing what you put out.

[andrew mitchell]

This has that haunting horror feel. What was the movie Chris? As always poetically perfect.

[Chris Shaw]

Thanks Andrew. So haunting, I can’t even remember its name. Have a happy Sunday.

Chris

[Davidgeo]

I like when your shadow writes.

It feels good sometimes doesn't it?

[Chris Shaw]

Thanks. It spilled out, dark as dark and then the light cane back. A fleeting visit is ok. I wouldn’t want to linger there.

Chris

[Davidgeo]

Have you ever seen a horror movie called Event Horizon? It's worth a watch of your in the mood for horror.

[Davidgeo]

(if, you're)

[Chris Shaw]

If it’s full of gore, I won’t go there, if it’s a psychological thriller, I might.

[Davidgeo]

It's definitely rated R. I can't if it's too gory but it does have some. Relatively speaking it's not so bad compared to what is considered gore these days. It's an interesting movie outside of the horror aspect. An overall good way to waste 90 or so minutes of your time.

[Davidgeo]

and I think you like physics... that movie would be considered "horror physics"... or "horror math"

[Thomas W Case]

Powerful writing. Scary stuff.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Thomas. I appreciate your visit.

Chris