Sweet Release

 

Circumstances

 

Weighing me

 

    D

 

      O

 

        W

 

           N

 

Heaviness

 

All around

 

 

Crying for

 

Release

 

Begging for

 

Retreat

 

 

I’ve carried this

 

Far too long

 

My strength being sapped

 

No longer strong

 

 

“Lay it down

 

  Lay it down”

 

  I hear from within

 

  Quietly and silently

 

  As the dropping of a pin

 

 

I release it gently

 

To His feet

 

At last I bask

 

In joy and in peace

 

Sweet release…

Reviews

[An Ordinary Woman]

Beautifully written, my dear and heard loud and clear. the simplest truths. This is wonderfully refreshing this morning and it lets me know that you are okay which makes me glad today.

You do this structure justice. :=) .... just sayin' .....
Love ya!

[Charles Booher]

This is great! I loved the structure of it. Excellently written. I loved the rhymic scheme you used, and the D O W N was so great!

[Brian Osterhouse]

You are absolutely right. The simplest truths bare merit. Sometimes we forget that we are already forgiven and hold onto guilt and hurt when all we have to do is let it go. You packed in a lot of meaning without being stylishly over indulgent. Definitely one of the top things I've read in a while.

[Whisperer]

Writing helps so may of us to find hope when we are in despair. This poem is very well said. It is 'sweet' and simple and echoes a deep sentiment, so many of us know...

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

All we have to do is lay our burdens down.. sweet release... an apt title , love this .. love the message you are sending out..

Chloe
xoxo

[Barry S. Maltese]

A nice refreshing little poem. We all need that release from the shackles of drudgery. Nice work, my friend.

[Phill Oz O'fee]

We too often allow ourselves to be a prisoner of guilt . Only we hold the key
for our release from this bondage.

John 8:32 (New Living Translation)

32 And you will know the truth, and the truth will set you free.

An elegantly poignant composition.

God�s Blessing
Phillozofee

[Valentine]

Strong statement for our Savior...nice write..thanks for writing it..God bless Valentine

[D. L. Hutson]

Amen, sista. Sometimes it's hard to lay it down but after I do, I do find that joy and peace. enjoyed reading. God Bless.

[Angie- Reading As Fast ..]

Oh, how I long for sweet release. This is beautiful and serene. It almost gives me hope! Excellent write, my friend! I love it.

[Norma J. Jessee]

Carole, this is a lovely poem , so elegant and richly done. To me it meant simply confessing something that was becoming to hard to continue carrying. Very beautifully done. Going to my favorites. I must thank James for sending me here to your lovely poem.