I want to linger...

I want to linger...

A Poem by An owl on the moon
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Random streams of thought on us...

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Fragrance of cinnamon bark

Over your swaying arcs

That dress slipping seamless…

I listen to your truffle giggles

Watch your lil wiggles

I love to dance to you…

On your skin, rhymes and verse

Freckles unrehearsed

Love reading your poetry…

Your soft midnight lips

The swaying curve of your hips

Saying hello to mine…

I want to linger

Wrapped ‘round your finger

No place I’d rather be…

You are sung

On my untamed tongue

Your name tastes like summer…

I don’t wanna miss

A single kiss

Or the scent of you in my dreams…

The architecture of you

Your form and style construe

We make the perfect us

© 2010 An owl on the moon


Author's Note

An owl on the moon
My thoughts tend to have different fonts… :)

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Dear Craig Froman,

I normally do not read things unless I am urged to read something whether it be through email or read request, but I finally gave into all of those small status updates about you having this as your featured poem. And it was well worth reading; thank you for sharing this poem with me, your reader. Though love poems do not come natural for me, you speak honest from your heart. I like the variation of fonts to separate stanzas, but I'd increase the second stanza by one more for people who may have trouble reading curly fonts. The theme is golden, one of the better love poems I've ever read as most people have really... crappy love poems.

To the poem: The poem starts out good with descriptive words: "fragrance of cinnamon bark," "Over your sway arcs." But as it compels forward, I sense a lack of flow mainly in the middle section of this poem, but you still pull this off with not only descriptiveness but also depth. Your depth is fathomable. You take the reader into the mind of the writer and back out with a clear understanding and a mouth desiring more. I love the illustration of you using the architecture and down on the third line of that stanza, show "make" in reference to architecture. Love is so sweet; but it can also be painful. I wish this could have been lengthened by maybe two stanzas to describe the "perfect us" you leave off of in the last stanza, probably because you ran out of the limited number of fonts on writerscafe.org, lol. Kudos. 9.8/10.

And thank you.

Sincerely,
S. W. Scaggs

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Reviews

How magnificent you are!! Using the feeling of your words in diffrent fonts.. I think we writers often think in many fonts! It seems that when you write about love or flirtation... You use a flowy romantic type script! It inly makes your words appel more to the writer this is my favorite by you!! Great job

Posted 12 Years Ago


Love it Craig, very well presented...

Posted 12 Years Ago


On your skin, rhymes and verse

Freckles unrehearsed

Love reading your poetry…
Beautiful damned beautiful could this be a real person?


Posted 12 Years Ago


This poem is so very romantic and lovely, the very meaning LOVE is a poem by itself...

Posted 12 Years Ago


I love the changing of fonts from one thought to the next. It's a wonderful idea, setting each thought to stand on its own, and they each do so very well. Beautifully penned, as always, my friend.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Just having a reread of this lovely vision.
Happy Sunday!

Posted 12 Years Ago


this.....
is .......shall we say, orgasmic...
haha.
Great poem as always. (:

Posted 12 Years Ago


Craig..so sweet and romantic..
the words linger on my mind long after i have read like a lover's breath..warm,sweet and tender.
I listen to your truffle giggles

Watch your lil wiggles

I love to dance to you…

On your skin, rhymes and verse

Freckles unrehearsed

Love reading your poetry…

Your soft midnight lips

The swaying curve of your hips

Saying hello to mine…

Posted 12 Years Ago


Sounds like you had an "electric tuesday afternoon" too........i love the sensuality that oozes from this and drips into my thoughts...........it makes me close my eyes and imagine........powerful images, well-conveyed. You think in fonts, eh? You must clearly dream in color too........

Posted 12 Years Ago


*deep sigh* in a great way. This just made me feel all warm inside. I love beautiful random thoughts. Lucky muse. : )

Posted 12 Years Ago



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