Try to touch the ground

She walks into the shadow, a rope gripped tightly in her hand.

With no way of escape, she finally has a plan.

Hey eyes still pink and swollen, he left her there in pain.

And when he comes home he will see, she is not going to play his games.

She throws the rope up high, then ties in her little scheme.

She will teach him this time, if you know what I mean.

She steps onto the chair still refusing to look down.

Puts the rope around her neck, and then tries to touch the ground.

He turns on the light and sees to his surprise.

A cold and lifeless body with pain still in her eyes.

With nothing but a letter taped onto her hand.

That tells this broken boy of her genius plan.

I love you but I hate you, and I need you to know why.

You make me so helpless no matter how hard I try.

I need your love to worm me without you I can't breathe.

You are the only part that I have ever loved about me.

But it simply drives me crazy this feeling that I know.

Your the only one that can hurt me, because I could never let you go.

Without you I am nothing, this love is like a decease.

Why do I need you in my shadow, there so I can breathe.

So in Vengeance of you control, I have decided to defy.

You will never have me there by your side.

Please do not doubt I love you, I swear the I do.

Its just becoming painfully obvious to me, that I can't live with out you.

Author's Note

This played out in my head like a scene from a play...so here it is. Let me know what you think please.

Reviews

[Jake Donald Stephens]

"Without you I am nothing, this love is like a decease".....disease?
If so, then I've suffered from that disease before, and it’s terrible.
I hope people will see this poem, and get the message.
There is just no reason to hurt each other.

[daisy]

So sad ahhh :( But generally I have to say i preferred the actual letter to the rest of the poem. But the letter was soooooo good and moving

[Ian Gilmour]

I'm struggling to think about the implications in the set up of your poem. He turns the light on, and suddenly, both of their worlds go completely dark. What does the contrast of light to dark suggest? Or, am I reading into it too much and he simply turned the light on as a routine after work because he gets off late in the evening? That aside, the tone is great, you can feel the despair in your word choices and one can easily envision the mixture of emotions that sprawl across his face, the suffering in his face as he reads that this hanging girl before him is his doing.

[Cougarsmark]

A week ago I was that desperate. Now I know there is hope. Hanging is a horrible way to go. What your character feels is not love but an obsession. It is such a sad yet frightening end. I hope you just imagined that feeling. You can touch it, if you know it.

[Oswald Chesterfield Cob..]

Very interesting, and sad. Made me tear up again :"""") you have a great talent, never waste it :)