Beneath the Clowds

Man's selfishness has gone to far...

Beneath the Clowds

Written by: C. Lee Battaglia

Beneath the clowds,

There is the city,

Big with crowds,

Not all are quite that witty,

Don't get cought in the wrong crowds,

I remember when,

There was no such thing as a city,

people lived in dens,

It may seem quite S****

People seem to change

Over time,

There goes a large range,

of how much socity has climbed

But still Man's heart,

has never changed

The piercing dart

to see how far their range,

will chart

Lust for power,

Lust for greed,

Is like a never ending shower,

Sprouted like a seed,

That seems to grow,

more every day,

It shows in a way how much they know,

It is in every way

Wrong

Beneath the clowds,

The people stay,

Trying to find there crowds

But, that is when their hearts sways,

Beneath the clowds

Author's Note

Change and find the right crowd for you...

Reviews

[Heartful5160]

It gets hard to find the right crowd to fit in with. As a high school student and especially as a freshman we get confused as to who we want to be or who we want to hang out with. I'm going to say this, I hung out with the wrong crowd, because all I wanted to be was cool and liked. Really, in the end inside it made me hurt and made me confused on what to do. I was broken and torn apart, because I wasn't happy at all with my self and the choices I was making. I wanted out of the hole I had put myself in for four years. So, I did and I dropped all the bad friends that I had and you know they gave me a hard time, because I no longer wanted to be with them and make the same choices they made. That just wasn't me. Me was being me and doing what I wanted to do. And from there I did! So, don't go and change yourself for the cool crowd. If you be yourself, you'll find people that'll except you for you and you don't have to try to be cool. You can be just you. Once again, great work and great write! Keep writing!

[C. Lee Battaglia]

Thank you! I really appreciate the review! If you ever need a friend to talk to, I'm here for you.

[Heartful5160]

Thank you so much for the caring and kind words. It was a great piece of writing!

[Terrence Chang]

Nice one Lee. Keep It going

[C. Rose]

I'm trying to decide if "clowds" instead of "clouds" is intentional. Perhaps to represent not fitting in?

there crowds should be their crowds
cought should be caught

[C. Lee Battaglia]

That is exactly what I meant it to be… And I'll be sure to change it... Thanks

[matpat]

I liked that poem you told the truth well

[C. Lee Battaglia]

Thanks Maddie!

[Valkyrie Warrior]

wow, a powerful and true write in a world of deceit!

[C. Lee Battaglia]

Thank you... I appreciate it!

[Valkyrie Warrior]

Your welcome!

[Obscured by the Shadows]

I have simple question, did you purposefully misspell clouds? Also, this is a very deep and wonderful poem. I write in the olden days back in times when there was no technology, an easier, yet more difficult time for us. A better time.

[C. Lee Battaglia]

Yes I did. :) thank you I appreciate the comment.

[Obscured by the Shadows]

No problem :D

[Coyote Poetry]

You took the reader to real places and thoughts.
"Lust for power,
Lust for greed,
Is like a never ending shower,
Sprouted like a seed,"
I believe we decide our place, journey and actions. Live for no-one or something. I enjoyed the poem. Open the door to a long conversation with many answers. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[C. Lee Battaglia]

Thank you coyote. I really like how you said it takes you to a different place.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome. I liked this poem.

[FarisGreybear]

wow. this totally sounds like something i've written. the only critique i would offer is that you please continue to write. i could care less about a few misspellings, the meaning of this poem has branded my heart like a hot iron! Wa-do!

[C. Lee Battaglia]

I will do that... I will do it for as long as I live... Thank you Faris, I am stunned by the comment...
If would look at some of my other writing, I think you would like it a lot...

[FarisGreybear]

headed to work, but when i get back home tonight, i gotta digest some more battaglia! i'm lovin it, like the mcdonalds i never ever eat at. it's good to know i'm not alone in my lamentations, it feels good. thanks friend. Wa-do!

[C. Lee Battaglia]

Haha okay... Thank you.

[armin]

Cities modernize and development goes under way but you know it's very true that growth and development brings a typical greedy change in their morals, behaviours, customs and traits. These changes go hand in hand with development .

A good write.

armin. ...

[C. Lee Battaglia]

Thanks Armin...