Fire

A house of fire, trapped, are the family.

Fire

Fire alarms scream

Piercing the nights’ silence

Awaking the sleeping family

To a picture of horror

Flames engulf the house

Trapped, they are

Waiting for the flames to eat them

Hear the shouts?

As they choke on the smother smoke

Hear the cries?

As flames scorch their skin

Living the worst nightmare

Of torture and pain

It’s over now

All that remains is rubble

Author's Note

This was inspired by a poem my best friend (hannajade) wrote. Dedcated to anybody who has lost anything due to a fire.
Please review! I also have another version of this, if anybody thinks I should post it....

Reviews

[Marie Harrison]

Fires are so scary. They destroy so quickly. Love this poem. My house that my husband and I lived in was in a fire. I called the fire department. He got really mad that I called them, but they saved our house. The plumber unknowingly set our house on fire when he smelted one of our pipes in the downstairs powder room. It set the fire between the lower and the upperfloor of our house.

[Calypso]

It's sad that this happens to people. Wonderful write.

[Steve]

Very intense....and emotional stuff. I almost hate to read this one....

[Alicante lullaby]

nicely done...a frightening death.

[Warren L.G De Mills]

post the other version i wanna see it :D interesting ...it certainly got the story across effectively and the short rhythm really aids in bringing it to life, language is decent aswell. one thing is that i didnt find myself entering the world of it, i wasnt particularly enthralled i felt like, "hey this is going good, w8? its over :( " kinda thing you know?

[Greg Skura]

Waking to a fiery death would not be my first choice for dying. Your poem made me think about the rhapsody of the sea when someone drowns and if fire would have the same effect after a point. Well Done!

[Steph's_romantic_myster..]

Very good poem I think you and Hannajade should muse them together and make a collaboration That would be awsome.... Excellent work!

[Margaret Marie Hubbard]

Very sad but good write!

[Linear]

It's really not a way anyone would choose to go. some vivid descriptions used to good effect, well done

[Kat24]

hi,
this is very interesting. kat24

[HopelesslyDevoted]

I lost three family members to a fire a few years ago... it is a living nightmare, thats for sure.