Good-bye Earth, Hello Peace

A science fiction story of peace.

Good-bye Earth, Hello Peace

Saying good-bye to my last slow sunset with Portia overlooking the Hoover Dam was the perfect way to remember my very last moments on planet Earth.  Thank goodness the invention of the Venus-Life Station would carry us to outer space before the fast projecting asteroid Vega would fatally strike the planet Earth.

 

Since 911, there were several underground movements organized to travel to other planets, hoping to invent a better way of life on a new planet.  Thank goodness for miracles because it’s out of tragedy that the Venus-Life Station was built; we were among five-hundred passengers to board the space vehicle. 

 

Five hundred people green at creating harmony in the world, but all focused seeking a future full of happiness and devoid of war’s carnage and disharmony.  This wasn’t a game now, we were launching off to save lives and to extend time for a portion of Earth’s former population.

 

Now we were drifting off with our view of the Earth getting smaller and smaller; while our futures were growing brighter and more hopeful.  We left behind our sad memories of our former planet because humanity’s brutality and acts of terror grew too intense to miss. 

 

Letting go of what was left behind was simple for all of us.  Daring to dream of our future was easier to reach for by leaving blood, death and destruction behind; in outer space our life of peace was launched.

 

 

Author's Note

My sci-fi fantasy. I think I started this fantasy the day of 911.
I wrote this for the ten word contest. Here are the words:
sunset
invent
lives
passengers
time
game
underground
green
happiness
Good-bye

Reviews

[Weaver]

"before the fast projecting asteroid Vega" - "projecting"? I don't think this means what you think it means. Also, there's already a star named Vega, and it's a very well-known one - we wouldn't give that name to an asteroid, too.
"Since 911" - "Since 9-11" (big difference)
"travel to other planets, hoping to invent a better way of life on a new planet." - awkward - try " travel to other planets, hoping to invent a better way of life there" instead
comma after "Thank goodness for miracles"
don't hyphenate "five hundred'
Five hundred people is far too few to form a sustainable colony on their own. Too small a gene pool, for one thing.
"all focused seeking" - "all focused on seeking"
period or semicolon, not comma, after "This wasn't a game now"
comma, not semicolon, after "smaller and smaller"
There's not really a story here, just a description of a situation.

[D.J. Lutz]

An excellent start to your next novel!

[Tina Kline]

This is fantastic! It's an opening chapter with everything it needs to make the reader want to keep reading.

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This made me want to know more and more and more.
It all seemed very symbolic to me for some reason.
Every one of the words seemed to be strategically placed.
I guess thats why. You put every one to great use.

I loved the overwhelming emotion of hope.

[bba]

Great work! Squeezing all those words to a great story! XD And I like the picture!

[Short.Nerd]

This was really good! Great job(:

[Linear]

You should write more of this, I enjoyed the trip.

[Coyote Poetry]

With war and pollution. Man will need a place to move. I don't know. Would man destroy another planet. The Native American question the white man from Europe way. "When the white man see a field or a valley. He don't see birds and the trees. He seem houses and cities. Is the white man blind to the thing that surround his life." 9-11 was one of many terrorist attacks in the USA. We needed better border control. USA always react too late. I was in the Army. Put 200 men on a plane. There will still be conflict. The poem is hopeful. But we need more hope and wise people on Earth to change our direction from hate to love.
Coyote

[Cynthia]

I never as I remember read a sci fic poetry, I think. I understand what you mean, and yet, I don't feel liek Jessica's sister ( Jessica is my friend), will truly say that, thats sucha interesting poem! And, no, dont listen to Jess, write what makes you comfort and suits you! Your reader will surly understand!

[Jessica]

OOOOOOOOOOOOOOH! Your poem is turly interesting! i like the over all feeling of your poem gave me. I feel ....... I feel that you are right. There is hidden element everywhere. But my younger sister keep on asking "what does it mean? It is too hard!" I suggest you should write another one which is more simple so that my sister and other small ids can appreciate your good work .
Keep your good work up!

[Moflo]

Oh wow very interesting. There is the hidden element that wherever humans go, such destructive forces will follow, but the naivety is creative and almost optimistic. This is a really nice write.