A Story That's Ending and Just Beginning

Tell the world your story and she'll show you her treasures.

In my bed I lie
The glowing electric red eyes
Silhouette the outline of your being
You're hear to sing death's lullaby

I haven't done the things I planned
So many regrets sinking in the sand

Will you take me above the marshmellow clouds
To see the little blue marble suspended in space
Yell goodbye to the world
One last hoorah to the human race

I imagine the other side is waiting on us

No more wishing
For things I should of done

Wishing on a wish
Has left me alone

I should have told her
My story
That just ended.

Reviews

[W. C. Forrest]

The ephemeral cycle is now at its end,
My deeds I take as my only wealth,
The final breaths and I ruminate yet,
Did I play my part written in book of destiny?
Or, I shaped my path forsaking the whimsical truths of divine decree?

Thought provoking piece written with subtlety and delicately. You have again managed to create a wonder that is heartfelt and profound.

[Latifa]

Will you take me above the marshmellow clouds
I just love thus line, really masterfully pinned my friend.

[Chris Micha]

Thank you so much! :)

[Bowers]

a very deep piece, yet again, with a meaningful message! "wishing on a wish/ has left me alone" so true, I can relate so well to your piece, and I appreciate the way you've written, so that the readers may relate to the piece!

[Chris Micha]

Thank you so much for your beautiful review! Nobody wants to leave this world with things left unsaid and undone. It's something that everyone should work towards. :)

[Bowers]

I totally agree, your right, we have such a bucket list, dont we? :D

[Chris Micha]

I know I do and dreams that I need to work towards. :)

[Tina Louise UK]

Wonderful imagery, beautifully touching, enjoyed hun :) x

[Chris Micha]

Thank you sweetness! Such kind words!

[CoraZanini]

Such a visual,beautiful poem.Great job Christian! I love how you play with pictures."Will you take me above the marshmellow clouds
To see the little blue marble suspended in space "

I'm amazed :)

[Chris Micha]

I am truly flattered! Thank you so very much!

[Sami Khalil]

"No more wishing
For things I should of done

Wishing on a wish
Has left me alone"

You write with relevance and precision. I see the silhoutte of a poet in those outlines...Bravo......

[Chris Micha]

My sweet Sami thank you my good friend!

[Sami Khalil]

Yu are welcome muchly...:).................

[Natalie Dieudonne]

"I haven't done the things I planned
So many regrets sinking in the sand."

This is something we all go through one time or another.

"Wishing on a wish has left me alone."

Cool line. Your work is really interesting.

[Chris Micha]

That means alot to me!! Thank you so much Natalie.

[Chris Micha]

I wish I knew how to get more views and reviews. Maybe it's not good enough yet. :/

[Natalie Dieudonne]

You're welcome. There are a lot of writers on here. So you have to put yourself out there and friend request people. It was like that for me in the beginning too. Just be patient, friendly, and believe in your work :)

Don't doubt your work, its good.

[Woody]

Very touching. I could feel sadness exhuding from the poem. The lines pluck the strings of the heart. beautiful write.

[Chris Micha]

Thank you soooo much! :)