Words & Scars

my mind is a whirlwind of thoughts,

depression is like a drug,

words are scars that cut six inches deep,

noone knows thoe,

im hideing hear,

dieing hear,

your words are like whips,

your whips are like words,

they all leave scars,

flesh,

fleshless,

it all scars,

it never fades,

time dosn't heal all hear,

eaternity is a curse,

cant you stop?

im bleading hear,

my mind fills with the blood.

like the guillteans of frances revolution,

only the wounds dont heal.

your words sink in,

make their mark,

drain me of my entity.

have you no compasion?

the toll it takes?

fortuited bombarded,

walls crumbled,

powers extinguished,

worlds in catastrophy,

stay out of my mind.

destroyer,

scarer,

whiper,

hater

ignorenge and intollerence,

in hear im dieing,

out their im dead.

i have nothing to give,

when you have striped it all away,

whiped me until im nothing but a scar,

scars dont heal,

time dosnt heal all,

the blood never ends,

the toll always grows,

when will you learn?

Reviews

[Unplain Unjane]

The content is really good. The only thing negative I have to say is just fix the spelling errors, Im not one to be turned off by errors as long as I can tell what you are sying but there are a lot of people like that, so I'm just looking out for you and helping your poem appeal more to others. But other than that I really liked the poem, it had a lot of emotion and good description words. Just make sure you dont get carried away with the big descriptive words. "Scars don't heal" = My favorite line, it's soo true.

[katyj]

Like this and enjoyed it.