Cold
A Poem by
coldust
a man wants to live forever and love forever....
Previous Version
This is a previous version of Cold.
A plethora of heartbreaks
have deleted this
© 2009 coldust
Author's Note
ps ignore my grammer, punctuation shortcommings...
Featured Review
Truly impressive.
I find it really hard to come up with short lines that hold a lot of meaning in them. but this piece is exactly one such sample.
Its not long I've gone
Don't say I don't belong
I'm still here like always
I no longer believe in the notion of Forever but this stanza almost makes it real.
My favorite however is the last stanza -
I could not say
When I had my breath
Now I want to live.
Posted 15 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
Reviews
Hysteria I feel today
In the endless slumber I get astray
Humor my dead heart says
I simply loved these lines a lot, though I liked the entire piece of writing but these lines outstands for me!
May be because this is exactly what I feel right now!
I also appreciate the brilliant flow of it, Overall it is a great piece of writing!
Posted 15 Years Ago
Hysteria I feel today
In the endless slumber I get astray
Humor my dead heart says
I simply loved these lines a lot, though I liked the entire piece of writing but these lines outstands for me!
May be because this is exactly what I feel right now!
I also appreciate the brilliant flow of it, Overall it is a great piece of writing!
Truly impressive.
I find it really hard to come up with short lines that hold a lot of meaning in them. but this piece is exactly one such sample.
Its not long I've gone
Don't say I don't belong
I'm still here like always
I no longer believe in the notion of Forever but this stanza almost makes it real.
My favorite however is the last stanza -
I could not say
When I had my breath
Now I want to live.
Posted 15 Years Ago
Truly impressive.
I find it really hard to come up with short lines that hold a lot of meaning in them. but this piece is exactly one such sample.
Its not long I've gone
Don't say I don't belong
I'm still here like always
I no longer believe in the notion of Forever but this stanza almost makes it real.
My favorite however is the last stanza -
I could not say
When I had my breath
Now I want to live.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
"Don't steal my grace
Flirt with my soul
Heavens I still want more"
loved these lines.. the poem on a whole is very very moving and of course eloquent... its a gr8 read.. :)
Regards,
Krishna
Posted 15 Years Ago
"Don't steal my grace
Flirt with my soul
Heavens I still want more"
loved these lines.. the poem on a whole is very very moving and of course eloquent... its a gr8 read.. :)
Regards,
Krishna