The Empty Port

A short descriptive piece. :) Based in Portsmouth for those who are interested.

Soft mud claws at the waterline, eager to once again escape the embrace of cold salt water, even if only for a few hours every night to feel the bright touch of the moon’s light play across it’s viscous surface. The ropes and lines of once great ships claw at their masts, slaves of a salt wind, providing the steady beat of a long forgotten port, a port that was once filled with the shouts of men and the cries of a roaring trade. But now the sounds just echo, bouncing from unadorned walls and falling onto the ears of the indifferent. The port rests itself, waiting once again for the shouts and cries that generations of people familiarised themselves with, accustomed their lifestyles to. But now this port, and the mud and tilted ships that lie within it is as empty as the memories that cling, like a sorrowful sea weed, to it’s walls. And now the water rises once again, an unstoppable beast waiting to consume it’s prey.      

Reviews

[DreyaArt]

wow beautiful writing. Very good descriptions, it was as if I were watching a movie. As a descriptive writer myself, I very much appreciate the descriptive writings of others.
The structure was good, nand I did not see and spelling mistakes. But then, I am not one to judge for I am a terrible speller.
May I just suggest, you are very good with description, there is no objection there, but remember to not be afraid to bring the reader completely into the writing, try adding smells for example. and you do very well qwith soiund, but whatabout touch? you personafed the mud wch is brilliant, but then you just left it there. Try perhaps to keep your inicial "character" persay in th rest of the story, so that we dont foget (we being the reader) Because at the en when you say "and now th water rises once again, an unstoppabl beast waiting to consume i's pre." what are you talkin about therey? I meean the recent or regular reader will understand what you are talingabou, but you hav to write like the person who wil bb reading it is lookin at yourwriting fo the first time, thattheychoseyour piece as the first thing hey will every read. Unerstand? but anyways thats jus a suggeston.

[Jake@jake]

I enjoyed reading this discriptive piece, it's entertaining. I think it needs a little bit more to give the reader context. Although reading it again maybe it can stand alone. The story is about the port, the author is at the port he thinks about how it was, sees it how it is, and concludes it is dying.

[H-Jonesy]

A lovely little discriptive peice it is. I throughly enjoyed this. Your discriptions are spot on, and thrilling. This peice makes me want to be there. I'll have to check out more of your work.
-Harmony :)

[Andrea Vargas]

I like the structure of your story. I would like to know what inspired you to write this? Good job!