Silver Rain

Silver Rain

A Poem by Priya

The water's falling on my roof,
drip drop, drip drop,
and the seconds wither away
in the soft confines of your gaze
as you hold me close,
safe from the freezing touch
of the silver rain

You are millions of miles in me,
drenched in the sweat of dreams
and the lavishness of thoughts,
inscribed in the pitter patter
of my heart

The clouds can't clear,
and I remember their silver waters
pouring
as you enter me slowly

© 2014 Priya


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"You are millions of miles in me,
drenched in the sweat of dreams... "

Such adorable lines! Liked the way how amazingly you have penned the poetry... well decorated & carved with quiteness of words. Loved the imagery of rain & love with dreams & miles. Looking forward to reading your work!

Posted 6 Years Ago


The writing is delicate, which reflects the sentiment and there's good use of language and metaphor. However, it reads a little awkward and could do with some work on the structure and rhythm.

Overall a nice write, though.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Beautiful. Also, admire you for what you are doing keep it up

Posted 10 Years Ago


"You are millions of miles in me,
drenched in the sweat of dreams
and the lavishness of thoughts,
inscribed in the pitter patter
of my heart" - My favourite

Loved this. :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


Great use of the word lavishness. I am a wordy person I love it when people go out of a normal zone. You did it quite well

Posted 10 Years Ago


You are millions of miles in me,
drenched in the sweat of dreams
and the lavishness of thoughts,
inscribed in the pitter patter
of my heart

Love, romance simply in its best form. Well done my friend

Posted 10 Years Ago


A very romantic, touching piece that relates well.

Posted 10 Years Ago


You are millions of miles in me,
drenched in the sweat of dream
very well dear. it is very romantic poetry and i can feel the sweet rain. nice of you dear/

Posted 10 Years Ago



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