Hopelessly Focused

I wake up early but sleep late.

I have determination of being someone truly great

but then I get lazy then I get dull then I get back up. I

I don't know what to do to get there

But I know which direction I want to go to

I'm talking too much in the first person.

But at the end of the day, I only have myself

I...I...I...I... need something more than motivation

I need a spark to lead me through a dark park full of

dares , distractions and final marks.

Need to get off this couch of hopelessness 

need to get off and get on my own two shoes

I guess I'm just venting hoping it'll stop.

But I know my darkness will help me find the purpose through the light. 

Reviews

[Kristin Lee]

This one has a lot of interesting twists. "my darkness will help me find purpose through the light" stands out the most. A remarkable reversal from the usual role these two play. I like you 5th stanza it has a lot of character. The second one needs some punctuation, it was difficult to distinguish what you were trying to say. But the overall message is great. You feel trapped within yourself, motivation is not enough, you need that spark, that carrot to dangle in front of you and lead the way. Good job.

[Aristede Craig Jr]

as well as light to dark dark to light
politely marked times hit
us from each direction
but you will feel better.....

[Traci]

But I know my darkness will help me find the purpose through the light.

Love this line!

This is a poem I believe many can relate to, myself included. We feel trapped, lack motivation, not sure where to turn, but once that spark is ignited, new challenges and opportunities await us. It is during these dark times that we do find purpose.

Good job, keep writing Jason.

[Parsimony]

I find it intriguing that the title implies one thing yet the poem emits another totally different stance. You seem not able to focus, with little direction, no goals to set your direction just a high aspiration to be great. No wonder you get bored when the goal is too lofty, without a well-thought out plan you become stagnant from paralysis. Then again, it's the lingering and pause of a writer that creates such great fodder. Your conviction at the end is strong but vague.

Sorry to be so honest.

[s y e]

Sometimes you got to vent, it kinda helps in a way. (: Keep writing, it's great!

~ Noodle.

[SyberRose]

You are young so you have a lot of time left to make your dreams come true...keep writing and painting.:)