Object

Look look, It's my right hand.

there's this boy I know. Was raised in the same environment as me

We lived by the word , hang out around the curb and do stuff that

at the time was oh so absurd

We would play with pokemon cards and laugh 

now is all about

how many hoes & how many cars, one have.

I mean, I'm only seventeen. I'm not caught up in the street life.

But the boy was on the yellow and ran past that green life.

He wasn't ready

For the "responsibility" a young urban kid has to go through.

After all he's just a kid. Hasn't had the time to let his mind

marinate. But the streets and the beat to his way of thinking 

are linked together as if it was the marriage.

Andddd the Priest for the marriage 

in this instance is the cororner or prosecutor

I just happen to speak my peace. Cause our brotherhood I respect but my honor 

                                      I object... 

Reviews

[Aislinn]

I find that the message that is given here is incredible. There are two teenagers who have grown up in the same place. They were friends at one point, but have fallen into different places later. I love how it emphasizes that not everything is up to childhood misfortune. Neither home situation is mentioned. It's entirely the choices of the two teens. I love this.

[kublakhan27]

As my avatar would suggest, it's hard for me to dislike a piece that references Pokemon :P Seriously though, this is a thoughtful and well-written commentary...nicely done.

[quinfinn]

nature vs nurture vs society.....it is the same old story, you just mix it up very well. awesome write!

[Rebecca Buller]

A truly incredible piece on choices and how they affect the rest our lives. This was brilliant and I enjoyed the voice in which it was written. I can hear this young man in my head. Great job!

[SyberRose]

Nicely done...life is full of choices....and you have to move on...Rose:)

[Onku Ghosh]

wonderful!!!! Two friends part ways because one gets caught up in the street life while the urban kid has a sense of responsibility.Very well written.I enjoyed reading this poem.

[Demure Penumbra]

Reality is harsh. This piece is wonderfully written.

[Jack...]

Very cool my friend.

[carol burgess romance]

So troublesome some paths in life certain young people choose to take.....excellent write...you say it with much truth

[Will Neill]

I'm a great fan CRZ, another good write.
Will

[Astro]

Interesting write on the different paths that veer and converge between friends and how urban life can offer up a lot of glamour or a lot of struggle and how it's only the strong who survive. I noticed a couple of grammatical errors, but I'm thinking English isn't necessarily your first language. I could be wrong, but I think you could clean it up and make it a really strong poem to be proud of.