SAD SOUL

SAD SOUL

 

Here lie's a sad soul

in the death of her shollw mind .

she cry's deadly tear's that brun's her life.

her mind spin's in to the bleven space

no one can even hear her cry

those sad deadly tear's .

that huntes her sad soul

in the death's of her shollw mind.

who is this one little girl who's heart

is brocken in too two

no one see her when ever she sad

thoght she sink's

into black death's of her shollw mind .

she cry's out for help

thoght no one listion's to her.

when she gose to sleep she

sink's faster in her shollw mind

and the deadly tear's kill her slowly.

but when she's crying look

and see that smile on her face

when her lover who has

no clue she even alive

but someday her

ture love will come for her

with open arm's

waiting for her 

THE END

Reviews

[Forgotten]

its very sad but powerful, it has alot of meaning to it.. I really like it.. Your doing a great job..

[Blindmikey]

Wow. This hit hard with me. It's something I've seen before. In myself and in others. We're not as alone as we've been fooled. So long as we have that light at the end of the tunnel, we'll have something to strive for. Hold on to that light. Find more of it. And never let it get away.

[poddar kushal]

sad and dark but, compelling too.

[-Adam-]

Very good! Sadness fallowed by enlightenment, it never fails to entertain. Well done, looking forward to whatever else you have locked up. Peace

[Wolfwind Words]

This was really ingenious. The way you worked in the broken words along the way, made this so much more amazing. And it inspires hope at the end. I like that!
I look forward to more from you!
Keep up the good work!

[SweetPeachesAlways]

Evokes such a feeling of sadness, incompleteness, melancholy, nostalgia...
no one listens to her...sad soul.
Good job...
Welcome to The Cafe!

[Joseph - Michael]

It reminded me of "The Corspe Bride" in some ways, but it's all good here...

By the way, welcome to the site...