Jet Blue

Jet Blue

A Poem by Hebe
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Sometimes a vacation turns into something unrecognizable....

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Sand so soft, nestling between my toes
silky blue water luring me into a cool emerald pool
I plunge and feel refreshed
the palm trees waving at me in the breeze
this moment, this feeling, this paradise
ripples of Neptunes salty waves embrace my being
I look at me
then I look at you 
trying to forget last nights fiasco
I see an oil slick following you as you move through the waves 
you look weighed down and tangled in slimy sea weed
the breeze batters your cruel monologue
and leaves your spew dangling in oncoming black clouds
you challenge this blue oasis to drown my euphoria
knowing how to perpetuate this nightmare into the balmy night
your ramblings are heard only by the regurgatating water fountain 
I focus on the complex pattern of the mosiac patio 
regret stains the yellow napkins of this elegant display of porcelain
the waiter looms over and reads the epilogue
I examine my choices, 
the fish arrives cooked to perfection staring at me in horror 
while the wilting lettuce struggles 
desperate to escape
 the sun dips its last rays into the edge of this magnificent blue sangria
captivated by the sight 
I swallow in silence the deliciously thin sliced potatoes
realizing the view is splendid beyond your appalling act of redemption
I laugh uncontrollably as the camera captures unforgettable moments



© 2017 Hebe


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Great opening line. Very tactile. Could almost feel the sand between my toes.

You also provide some juicy imagery.

"you look weighed down and tangled in slimy sea weed"

Very detailed. Yes, sea weeds quite slimy.

I also dig this

"your ramblings are heard only by the regurgatating water fountain "

Again, you confront the senses. I could almost hear the fountain and the gurgling. Visceral.

"I swallow in silence the deliciously thin sliced potatoes"

Now I taste!

The last lines kinda wander off almost into hysteria

Feels like overload on the speaker

Good stuff. Think this is my fav piece of yours thus far.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Hebe

2 Years Ago

Hi Alessander...thank you so much for your comments...glad you enjoyed it :)
This is my heaven! I found this poem quite refreshing for some reason :D!
Thank you for sharing :)!

Posted 2 Years Ago


Hebe

2 Years Ago

Hi Zaisham... thank you for your review.... refreshing in a sick kind of way ;)
Very beautiful...........

Posted 2 Years Ago


Hebe

2 Years Ago

Thank you Jes
Take a paradise - any paradise and there will always be conflict evident - I bet even Eden was a riot after the apple was eaten.
Great imagery Hebe - a good yin/yang balance.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Hebe

2 Years Ago

Hi Tony.... true there is yin/yang in everything. Thank you for reviewing :)
nice and not so nice. jetted away to a reluctant getaway but you make it ok with your words & imagery. many great lines. we all carry baggage with us. catchy title and subject.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Hebe

2 Years Ago

Hi Pete....how's it going? Thank you for your words. We only get glimpses of paradise ;)
Pete

2 Years Ago

i'm ok despite the insanity taking place in this world. hope you are too my friend! :)
Hebe

2 Years Ago

Yes totally agree...... everything is a mess. Not encouraging at all!
Nicely descriptive, Hebe.

Arguments and fights on a holiday are only amplified in nature because they inevitably ruin the whole exercise of travelling to some exotic place for rest and relaxation; the experience is somewhat ruined and the beauty of the surrounds can be lost in the cloud of animosity that ensues.

A write that is very truthful for most of us and is written in such a descriptive way that it places the reader right there amongst this gloomy paradise.

Fine work.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Hebe

2 Years Ago

Thank you Dooley, love your reviews you have a way of summing up everything perfectly :)
A sad tale of dischord. I guess life is very complicated and some of us struggle with our inner selves and it comes out in unpleasant forms. You capture your experience well in this descriptive and sensitive piece even though there is sadness and anger mixed in with shock and disbelief.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Hebe

2 Years Ago

Hi John thank you for you comments. ...hell in paradise :)
John Alexander McFadyen

2 Years Ago

I'll have a piece of it to fit into my jigsaw lol!
I agree. No-one liked a fish looking back at you. A interesting day my friend. Even the bad days become worthwhile. Make us laugh and thankful for good company. Thank you for sharing this tale.
Coyote

Posted 2 Years Ago


Hebe

2 Years Ago

Unfortunately bad company spoils even rhe most beautiful scenery. Thank you my friend....
Coyote Poetry

2 Years Ago

Food and bad company. I agree. Would mess up a vacation. You are welcome my friend.
Sorry Hebe, my eye sight is horrible and the small font is killing my eye. Could you double space it or enlarge the font?

Posted 2 Years Ago


sinNsincerity

2 Years Ago

Thank you, my eyes appreciate it.
I like how this poem gives me positive vibes as well as neg.. read more
Hebe

2 Years Ago

Exactly. ........paradise and hell at the same time. Appreciate your review. :)
sinNsincerity

2 Years Ago

Always....

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