Energy

A buzzing cacophony of frequencies
Emanating between our faces
Hair on end
Blood flowing to the skin
Heat fills the gap
No touch, no sound
Just you and me
Faces close
Energy pulling me to you
Like a moth to a flame
I break

Reviews

[A hare off]

Sounds like an intensity that would be hard to resist. Really good Dana.

[Dana Ferguson]

Thank you! :)

[Relic]

The bond formed between two people can be electric. There's an immediacy to it at times. Well said here.

[Dana Ferguson]

Thank you so much :)

[JMaster1]

I loved it , and loved the picture you add here as well

Energy pulling me to you
Like a moth to a flame
I break

Powerful , I adore short poems :)

[Dana Ferguson]

Sometimes I feel like less is more :) Thank you for your kind compliments :)

[Adam Adams]

Not a bad shot. Love's energy you be talkin' of here around ... that heals heart with an ev'ry touch of its fire 'pon raged skin. It pulls spirit close to each other like a magnet and break 'em into pieces with time with the same tornaments of energy. Nice flow of ink!

[Philip Muls]

My story Temptation ends on the same note...attraction. But your type of attraction is so much better. I welcome your feedback.

[Dana Ferguson]

Thank you Philip! You're too kind :)

[Chris]

I like the immediacy of the end...

[DirectTangent]

You have a lot going on in a relatively short work. That you put it in an present, active tense energizes it even more. Then you change that with the last line. Nicely done. I enjoyed it.

[Dana Ferguson]

Thank you :)

[Insight "MH"]

I love how you described every ounce of the inner emotions flowing at that moment of gaze.

Insight.

[Dana Ferguson]

I'm so glad you enjoyed it :)

[alifeacoustic]

A wonderfully creative description of that feeling that when felt, sets your senses alight and your thoughts to nothing but the senses, putting all other thought on standby until further notice. I like the ending, I break... There isn't much more you can do than succumb to the energy. Great write Dana.

[Dana Ferguson]

Thank you :)