Useless

I’m never a first choice.

I am dusted,

Thoughtlessly onto

The back of the book shelf

With the dead fly

And leftover coffee

Receipt, and the boring

Informative novels

That people avoid

Until they must read,

And then pretend

To understand.

 

Nobody writes songs

About a girl like me.

I am not worthy

Of being a muse.

There is nothing

Inspiring about

The tangled neurons

In my inconsistent brain.

Or the frozen muscles

In my heart.

 

I am not the kind of

Girl who people fall for

At first sight.

I can’t weave my words

Into phrases, and as I

Speak I feel the

Incompetence spread

Like fatal toxin

From my mouth down

To my toes

And back up again

Forming bile in the back

Of my throat.

 

I am insignificant,

Unworthy,

Useless. 

Reviews

[Rahul]

I can’t weave my words, Into phrases, and as I
Speak I feel the, Incompetence spread
Like fatal toxin, From my mouth down
To my toes, And back up again
Forming bile in the back, Of my throat... Nice penned "Dana". Keep writting, yu're gonna hit the sky very soon. This above one stanza is great. I think you were thinking about yourself when you were writing this piece and when you were sad i think (Not sure). "Useless", nice concept for writing. It's real one.

Well written. 100/100 :)

[Dana Alsamsam]

thank you!

[Invisible]

I think a lot of girls have felt that way, people in general of course, but for the sake of this write we'll only mention girls. it's probably cause men suck so much lol

[Michael G. Smith]

Your the kind of girl all guys want to marry. One lady with wit, personality, charm and depth. Plastic melts when life gets too hot.

[Dana Alsamsam]

i can't believe i missed this review when you posted it! thank you so much this is too kind :)

[ChemicalMadness]

I really enjoy the way you break your lines in places...and I'd disagree...you DO weave words. You could clean a few things up here and there (third stanza, no need for "who" after Girl, for example), but overall, I thought this was quite good...

CM.

[Dana Alsamsam]

thank you! this was one where i got the idea and just got it down quickly and i completely agree that it could use some editing. Thanks for the suggestions and thanks for reading!

[B-poet]

Interesting. If self loathing was deserving of a written creed then this is the masterpiece for it. You've cleverly displayed the adaption regarding the topic at hand with ease. I commend you for that. Great job. :)

[Dana Alsamsam]

thank you! I am not generally self loathing, but we all have our times and days, and this was the product of one of mine. thanks for reading!