Let the Children Dance

I wrote this a while ago because I had to move away from my friends, which means I won't be able to graduate from high school with them.

The time has come to lay to rest the years that we spent holding hands

So let the children dance while they have the chance

Forever sings serenades in perfect harmony with sweet serenity

So let the children dance while they have the chance

The pain hits like a supernova coursing through my veins

As I leave this place I know I'll never be the same

Summer has arrived at last and with it the last time we will get

To let the children prance, play their games and dance

The pendulum keeps swinging on beyond the baby steps of dawn

So let the children prance while they have the chance

The feelings screaming inside of me are slowly getting out

No words shall go unsaid; I'll make every moment count

Although magicians have cast their spells over our destinies

I won't ever forget a single melody

I will always remember September

We gaze up at the galaxies sleeping in the starry sky

Both aware that very soon we'll have to say goodbye

So let the children dance while they have the chance

Author's Note

I want to know what you honestly think about this. I want to become a professional songwriter someday, so please give me your honest opinion.

Reviews

[Cool Girl]

Man, I really like this! I love music so much, and sometimes when I read poems, I hear a tune with it:) I want to be a professional singer and songwriter eventually. This was really cool..I like the part about children dancing! Maybe you, Lizardo, and I can work on a piece someday:) That'd be fun!

[DoormanDan]

Yes, that would be amazing! I had a tune in my head when writing this. Think of a beat similiar to Wake me up when September Ends by Green Day. Never stop pursueing that dream of your CG. I want to be a professional songwriter to someday. Hopefully both of our dreams will come true :)

[Cool Girl]

Yes indeed:) Thanks, Dan!

[DoormanDan]

Any time :)

[Lizardo]

Dude, this is truely amazing, I really like how you added the astronomy on it, it gives a unique ''touch' from you to it, this a beautiful poem and the last line, it gave me the idea of some children being privaded from being ''children'' and then comes a mand or someone and tells the others:
''let the children dance''
Amazing poem, really good Dan! :)

[DoormanDan]

Thanks for checking this one out Lizardo! I wrote this poem during a time when my songwriting style was only just beginning to take the form it is now. Feels like so long ago now lol. :)

[Lizardo]

jajaja the old-school Really good :)

[Stephanie K.]

This was truly beautiful.
"The feelings screaming inside of me are slowly getting out
No words shall go unsaid; I'll make every moment count"
This is my favorite part and I honestly don't know why.
Something about it just seems to be on a much deeper
level, but that's the goal of writing isn't it? To make your
words speak to others? Please keep writing and continuing to share. :)

[DoormanDan]

Indeed that is the goal of writing. Thanks for the kind review, i'm glad you liked this poem!